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Essay: shops Opening hours in the retail sector It is a fact universally acknowledged that the world is increasingly growing as well as consumerism. That is the reason why the issue about when the shops should be open in the European Union came out recently. Recent research indicates that 70% of the shops in our country don’t open at the weekends nor in the public holidays. In addition to this, few people would dispute that an extensive opening hours would be beneficial for our community. Taking this into account, the government should set some laws concerning this issue. This could be allowing shop owners to decide whether or not they open their shops inside an establish limit such as opening two weekends per month. There can be no doubt that opening the shops 7 days a week is an advantage for those citizens who don’t have time to go shopping during the week. However, another point worth mentioning is that this measure would increase consumerism and could be a nightmare for those who work in the retail sector since they would have no spare time either. In conclusion, although most people would generally agree that shops should be open everyday, few would deny that this measure would not be to our advantage at all. That is the reason why I personally believe that the owner of the shop should be able to decide the opening of his business at his convenience on the condition that they obey the law and treat their workers in a proper way.

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Essay: shops

Opening hours in the retail sector

It is a fact universally acknowledged* that the world is increasingly growing as well as consumerism. That is the reason why the debate about when the shops should be open in the European Union came out recently.

Recent research indicates that 70% of the shops in our country don’t open at the weekends nor on public holidays. In addition to this, few people would dispute that extensive opening hours would be beneficial for our community. Taking this into account, the government should set some laws concerning this issue. This could be allowing shop owners to decide whether or not they open their shops inside an established limit such as opening two weekends per month.

There can be no doubt that opening shops 7 days a week benefits those who have little time to shop. However, another point worth mentioning is that this measure would increase consumerism and could be a nightmare for those who work in the retail sector since they would have no spare time either.

In conclusion, although most people would generally agree that shops should be open everyday, few would deny that this measure would not be to everyone's advantage. That is the reason why I personally believe that the shop owner should be able to decide the opening of his business at his convenience on the condition that they obey the law and treat their workers in a proper way.

*Does Jane Austin also acknowledge it?

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Essay: shops

Opening hours in the retail sector

It is understood  It is a fact universally acknowledged that the world's population and consumerism is are increasingly growing as well as consumerism. Hence, we in the European Union have begun discussing shops' opening hours.  That is the reason why the issue about when the shops should be open in the European Union came out recently.

Just focusing on this bit.  "increasingly growing" is a tautology, best to avoid.  

"It is a fact universally acknowledged" is good English but take a bit of care for two reasons, 1) it makes one recall other well known sayings from English comedy  2) it is also a slightly odd phrase.  The world is not growing, the human population is. 

Both sentences is just too complicated.  Your core English is pretty good but you now need to learn how to simplify things.  I suspect that there are a bunch of teachers in Europe who like to teach complicated English, while native speakers normally use only the core 10000 words.  Much as Spaniards do.




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Just a thought on your logic, why would people who work all week want 7 day opening? Surely they just want 2 day a week opening, Saturday and Sunday?

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