我的周末。My weekend.

星期六天气很好，所以我出去走走。我去遍布市中心我去了市中心 ( In chinese, we do not tend to use something like  go all over the city center)。在我的城市有多的咖啡店,但是我寻找了咖啡馆。 我找到一家，但是这家已经关门 了。 所以因此我到去了我的最喜欢的咖啡店。在那里我喝了一杯咖啡也吃了一块蛋糕。，后来然后我回家。在家里我和我的朋友玩电脑游戏。 后来然后我为在我的频道进行做了视频。我有一个频道关于外语的频道。后来然后我睡觉。
星期天吃了早饭后我编辑那个视频。后来然后我和一个朋友从italki用Skype谈话聊天（然后我用skype和一个在italki上认识的朋友聊天）。他是乌克兰人，所以我们用乌克兰文和英文说话聊天。和他聊完天后， 我也和我父母也用Skype和父母谈话。

Saturday’s weather was good, so I gone for a walk. I went all over the city center. There a lot of cafes in my city, but I looked for coffee house [i’m really not sure if the difference is clear and how to express it in Chinese, sorry :( ]. I have found one(我找到一家咖啡馆）, but it was closed（但是已经关门了）. Therefore I gone to my favorite cafe. There I drank a cup of coffee and ate a piece of cake. After that I came home. At home I played a computer game with my friend. Then I made a video for my channel. I have a channel about foreign languages. After that I gone to bed.
Sunday, after breakfast I edited those video. Then I spoke in Skype with a friend from italki. He is Ukrainian, so we spoke in Ukrainian and English. After that I spoke, also in Skype, with my parents.

请正确更正这个文章, 谢谢!

1.the difference between 然后and后来

After I do somthing,  I continue to do something else. I do somehing , then I do something else. You can use 然后 in these examples. If the interval time between two activity is short, we should use 然后.   

If the interval time is very long(maybe more than 1 month or 1 year), you can use 后来. 

2.我在中国居住了很多年。 后来我去了俄罗斯学俄语。（ after I live in china for many years, I go to russia to learn russian)  Dislike english, we tend to use 后来 in a single sentence, if a person use 后来, we can assume the person want to say that something has changed a lot. (eg, life has changed, people have changed, personality has changed. job has changed.) actually, before I say 后来, i wil first say many words to imply something is abiout to change. Then, my last word will begin with 后来.

然后我为在我的频道进行做了视频.  The false is caused by the order of words. In chinse, we would say I am in my channel  make a video( please ingore the grammer mistakes in english, it the correct order of words in chinese) 我在我的频道做了一个视频。

3. 谈话 is a little formal.  For example,  the president is 谈话. A teacher is talking to a student(一个老师正在和一个学生谈话）

说话. for example, 我正在说话= i am saying. 我说话很直接=I speak very directly. 聊天 means chat.

我的周末。My weekend.

星期六天气很好，所以我出去走了走。我去遍布走遍了市中心 。在我的城市有多的许多咖啡店但是我在寻找了咖啡馆。（There is almost no difference between cafe and coffee house in Chinese. What do you call a STARBUCKS？） 我找到了一家，但是这家关门了 。 所以我到了我的最喜欢的咖啡店。在那里我喝了一杯咖啡又也吃了一块蛋糕。后来我回家了。在家里我和我的朋友玩了电脑游戏。 后来我为我的频道进行录了视频。我有一个频道关于外语的频道。后来我睡觉了。
星期天早饭后我编辑了那个视频。后来我和一个在ITALKI上认识的朋友从italki用Skype谈话。他是乌克兰人，所以我们用乌克兰文和英文说话对了话。 后来我和我父母也用Skype谈话对了话。

1、In Chinese, 了 means past and perfect tense after verbs，过means perfect tense

我喝了一杯咖啡。I drank a cup of coffee.

我喝过一杯咖啡了。I have drunk a cup of coffee.

Saturday’s weather was good, so I gone for a walk. I went all over the city center. There a lot of cafes in my city, but I looked for coffee house [i’m really not sure if the difference is clear and how to express it in Chinese, sorry :( ]. I have found one, but it was closed. Therefore I gone to my favorite cafe. There I drank a cup of coffee and ate a piece of cake. After that I came home. At home I played a computer game with my friend. Then I made a video for my channel. I have a channel about foreign languages. After that I gone to bed.
Sunday, after breakfast I edited those video. Then I spoke in Skype with a friend from italki. He is Ukrainian, so we spoke in Ukrainian and English. After that I spoke, also in Skype, with my parents.

请正确改正这个篇文章, 谢谢!

我的周末     My weekend

星期六的天气很好，所以我出去走了走。我走遍（went all over）市中心 。虽然我所在的城市（in my city）有许多的咖啡馆，但是我更倾心于（looked for）咖啡厅。 我终于找到了一家（have found one），但却关门了。 所以，我只有到我最喜欢的咖啡馆去。在那里，我喝了（you should use"了" behind Chinese verbs when you used past tense in English, for example:drink _喝、drank_喝了；eat_吃、ate_吃了）一杯咖啡也吃了一块蛋糕。后来我回了家。在家里，我和我的朋友玩电脑游戏。后来，我为我的频道制作（made）了视频。我有一个关于外语的频道。之后，我睡觉了。
星期天，我在早饭后编辑了那个视频。然后，我和一个来自（from）italki的朋友通过（in）Skype对了话。他是乌克兰人，所以我们用乌克兰文和英文交流（“交流” is more commonly）。 后来我和我父母也用Skype对话。

Saturday’s weather was good, so I gone for a walk. I went all over the city center. There a lot of cafes in my city, but I looked for coffee house [i’m really not sure if the difference is clear and how to express it in Chinese, sorry :( ]. I have found one, but it was closed. Therefore I gone to my favorite cafe. There I drank a cup of coffee and ate a piece of cake. After that I came home. At home I played a computer game with my friend. Then I made a video for my channel. I have a channel about foreign languages. After that I gone to bed.
Sunday, after breakfast I edited those video. Then I spoke in Skype with a friend from italki. He is Ukrainian, so we spoke in Ukrainian and English. After that I spoke, also in Skype, with my parents.

请帮我校正这个文章, 谢谢!（please help me to correct this essay,Thanks！ ）

我的周末。My weekend.

星期六天气很好，所以我出去走走。我逛遍市中心 。在我的城市有许多的咖啡店但是我想找一家咖啡馆（In Chinese, coffee house and café are almost same. ）。 我找到一家，但是这家关门 。 所以我到我的最喜欢咖啡店。在那里我喝了一杯咖啡也吃了一块蛋糕。之后我回家。在家里我和我的朋友玩电脑游戏。 后来我为我的频道进行了视频。我有一个频道关于外语。后来我睡觉。
星期天早饭后我编辑那个视频（You translated this sentence wonderful）。后来我和一个朋友从italki用Skype谈话。他是乌克兰人，所以我们用乌克兰文和英文说话。 后来我和我父母也用Skype谈话。

Saturday’s weather was good, so I gone for a walk. I went all over the city center. There a lot of cafes in my city, but I looked for coffee house [i’m really not sure if the difference is clear and how to express it in Chinese, sorry :( ]. I have found one, but it was closed. Therefore I gone to my favorite cafe. There I drank a cup of coffee and ate a piece of cake. After that I came home. At home I played a computer game with my friend. Then I made a video for my channel. I have a channel about foreign languages. After that I gone to bed.
Sunday, after breakfast I edited those video. Then I spoke in Skype with a friend from italki. He is Ukrainian, so we spoke in Ukrainian and English. After that I spoke, also in Skype, with my parents.

请正确这个文章, 谢谢!