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Education2 I was in the university, I felt that every university doesn’t often have a good environment to study because when I took a class with lecture with a big classroom and a wonderful screen; nevertheless, students didn’t listen to the lecture seriously and even though some students were late in class every time, because I thought that they didn’t have a passion for the subject because they might not be a class which they wanted to take or the class was made an environment that being late in class is allow to be such as too big classroom. To put it simply, if a university provides a great opportunity to study, students don’t notice how valuable it is at that time. Moreover, it doesn’t always to get involve promoting learning for students. Even so, Trachtenberg describes that long school day and convincing students that they spend much time in school because this is what their occupation really is(215), he doesn’t show to persuade his point with university model. Trachtenberg indicates that the benefits of school and education in twenty-century school calendar would provide two positive things to teachers(216), and these are a greater sense of pride and helping a new teacher. Trachtenberg gives us the some possibility problems which are the money problem, preconscious mind processes and put away the community and opportunity from family. One of the suggestion that the author explains that additional time can be used to individual instruction, tutoring, and creating challenging assignment and project(217), and I believe that this opinion is really good opinion to be longer school day because when I was junior/high school student, I couldn’t get any optional time to improving my knowledge; hence, I had been to a private tutoring school for more than 4 years while I was student. What’s more, I wouldn’t complain about longer school day or short holidays if my school could provide these opportunities because it was necessary not only me but also other students. In the problems, I agree with the currently schooling calendar which school time and day should be longer because Trachtenberg explains the time is changing year by year, and as long as we can adapt successfully to technology, we are also sure to be able to change from the agrarian calendar to the twenty-century school calendar. Trachtenberg also announces that we should reset the clock; therefore, we need to change the calendar(217).

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When I was in university, I sometimes felt like it wasn't a good environment to study in.  For example, even in large lecture halls with big screens up front, there were still several students who didn't listen or take the lecture seriously.  There were also certain students who were consistently late, and they may have thought it was acceptable since the class is so big, or maybe they just weren't passionate about what they were studying.  To put it simply, I don't think students are taking advantage of the great opportunities the school is giving them to learn.  I also think that it doesn't always get to promote learning for students.  Even so, Trachtenberg tries to convince students that they spend so much time in school because it is important, but he doesn't try to prove this point with the university model.  


今日忙しいから、一つ部分を添削しました。役に立ったでしょう :)(hope this was helpful)

私はちほさんの文章について、何を話したいかちょっと分からないかもしれません。質問があったら、教えてくださいね。I may have misinterpreted what you wanted to say in your article.  If you have questions please let me know.

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