Writing - My new room
Hello Tom,
Thank you for your letter. It was nice to hear from you.
Well, I made a lot of changes.
First, I changed my old bed because I bought a new bed bigger than last one and it’s very comfortable, I sleep like a child.
Secondly, I painted my room in blue because it is my favourite colour.
In addition, I bought a new chair for studying because I need it.
In conclusion my room is a beautiful place now. I love it.
Please write me back soon
Regards,
JuanFran.
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Writing - My new room
Hello Tom,Thank you for your letter. It was nice to hear from you.
Well, I made a lot of changes.
First, I changed my old bed because I bought a new bed that is bigger than the last one. It’s very comfortable, I sleep like a child.
Secondly, I painted my room in blue because it is my favourite colour.
In addition, I bought a new chair for studying because I need it.
In conclusion my room is a beautiful place now. I love it.
Please write me back soon
Regards,
JuanFran.
Your letter is very easy to understand, some of the grammar is just a little bit strange. "In addition" is correct, but feels a little stiff. "Also" would be a good word to use. "In conclusion" is correct too, but you don't need it. "My room is a beautiful place now." sounds more natural.
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