Imaginitive story ;
Though it was in the middle of the day, the room was in complete darkness. Only silence filled the glommy room.
A second later comforter was rustling a bit and then a pale-looking girl came out. Her eyes were blank and her hair was all messed up. Blinking a few times, she drew a long sigh.
The girl was about to turn on the switch of the room but then plunked down on the bed as if she ran out of any energy.
Through the window reached her ears a sound - kids' shouts, people's chatters, and birds' chirping.
Guided by instinct, when she drew the curtains aside, the sunlight flooded in. Her eyes grew misty as viewing the colorful and lively scenes, sitting still.
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Soyeon, very good writing. These are some corrections from my understanding of the story. If you have questions, let me know. - Jason
Imaginitive story ;
Though it was in the middle of the day, the room was in complete darkness. Only silence filled the glommy room.A second later the comforter was rustling a bit and then a pale-looking girl came out. Her eyes were blank and her hair was all messed up. Blinking a few times, she drew a long sigh.
The girl was about to turn on the switch of the room but then plunked down on the bed as if she ran out of any energy.
Through the window a sound reached her ears a sound - kids' shouts, people's chatters, and birds' chirping.
Guided by instinct, when she drew the curtains aside, the sunlight flooded in. Her eyes grew misty as viewing the colorful and lively scenes, sitting still.
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Imaginitive story ;
Though it was in the middle of the day, the room was in complete darkness. Only silence filled the gloomy room.A second later the comforter was rustled a bit and then a pale-looking girl came out. Her eyes were blank and her hair was all messed up. Blinking a few times, she drew (let out) a long sigh.
The girl was about to turn on the (lights?) switch of the room but then plunked down on the bed as if she ran out of any energy.
Through the window a sound reached her ears - kids' shouts, people's chatters, and birds' chirping.
Guided by instinct, when she drew the curtains aside, the sunlight flooded in. Her eyes grew misty as viewing the colorful and lively scenes, sitting still.
I really enjoyed reading this great imagination and the words you choose where really colorful!
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