20160211 - I applied several sentences from TED to my daily life, after watching it.
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When it comes to workout, the principle that I should bear in mind is simple. “The more efforts I put into workout in a right manner, the more muscles I can build. (123)” But this simple one is not as easy as it seems. That’s why I signed up for the personal training course a few weeks ago. After completing the program, I use up all my energy and feel strong. Before & After photos plastered on the wall also get me motivated to do my best even if it feels like I’m dying.(111) Changing attitude towards building muscles began with the workout in a right way thanks to my trainer.(134)
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20160211 - I applied several sentences from TED to my daily life, after watching it.
20160211When it comes to workout working out, the principle that I should bear in mind is simple. “The more efforts I put into workout working out in a right manner, the more muscles I can build. (123)” But this simple one is not as easy as it seems. That’s why I signed up for the a personal training course a few weeks ago. After completing the program, I used up all my energy and feel felt strong. Before & After photos plastered on the wall also get me motivated to do my best even if it feels like I’m dying.(111) Changing my attitude towards building muscles began with the workout in a working out in the right way thanks to my trainer.(134)
Your writing is good! I like how you used 'plastered' to describe the photos you get motivation from.
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20160211 - I applied several sentences from a TED talk to my daily life, after watching it.
Consider rephrasing - "After watching a TED talk, I took several lessons from the talk."When it comes to working out, the principle that I should to bear in mind is simple. “The more efforts I put into working out with correct posture (I'm not exactly sure what you meant here, so this is my guess) in a right manner, the more muscles I can build. (123)” But this simple principle one is not as easy as it seems. That’s why I signed up for the personal training course a few weeks ago. After completing the program, I am exhausted (this is a different way to say 'use up all my energy') [use up all my energy] and but feel strong. The Before & After photos plastered on the wall also get me motivated to do my best even if it feels like I’m dying.(111) Changing my attitude towards building muscles began with the workout in a right way thanks to my trainer showing me the right way to do things.(134)
I took some liberties to make an assumption about what you learned from the trainer. Note, I'm a native American English speaker, I prefer the phrase, "build muscle" vs. "build muscles." I would be more likely to say, "build muscle" vs the plural; I've also worked out with a personal trainer.
Good luck as you continue to train!
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