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Introduction
I'm Ibuki, from Japan. I'm an university student.
I wanna get a job in which I can am able to work abroad or to work with foreign people in the future, so I wanna get many experiences talking with people in English. to talk with people who speak english because i wanna to catch many experience via learning english
Moreover or (you cannot put two same adding phrases you can choose onle one)
(despite) via English practice, I wanna make be friends with many people and know about many different cultures. who have different cultures
If you are interested in Japan n in Japanese culture you can add me as a friend!!
introduction
I'm Ibuki, from Japan. I'm a university student.
I wanna get a job in which I can work abroad, or work with foreign people in the future, so I wanna get many experience with talking to people in English.
(When it comes to the word 'experience', there's different usages. Experience in this case means getting used to it and improving. Example would be: 'I have experience in this line of work.' Meaning you have done it before and would know how to get by.
But, 'many experiences' sounds more like an event that happened. 'I had many different experiences in that country.' Lots of things happened.
If you wanted to emphasize that you wanted to get put in lots of situations talking to different people in English, what you wrote would be right, but it would sound a bit awkward.
"I wanna have lots of different conversations with people in English." might sound better.)
Moreover, despite along with English practice, I wanna be friends with many people and know about many different cultures.
('despite' here makes me think that English practice would be somehow going against the friendship. Usually, it's used in a somewhat negative light. Example: "Despite not studying a lot, I passed the exam." or "Despite being short, I can jump higher than him."
So you are going in spite of something. 'Even though we're doing English practice, you can still be friends.' kind of thing.)
If you are interested in Japan and Japanese culture, add me as a friend!!
I understood everything, which means the writing was good. It's just the small stuff that I tried helping.
I'm sorry if my explanations are kinda long-winded. If you have any questions, please let me know ^_^
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