IELTS writing task 1
By examining the chart, we could conclude that there was an increase and decrease in the percentage of British people donating money to charity across different age categories in the years 1990 and 2010.
After comparing the two years, 1990 proves to be the year where people were the most generous. In the year 1990, the 36-50 years old category contributed the most to donation while in 2010, people from 51-65 years old had the highest percentage. The lowest contribution across all categories in the two years, is the 18-25 year old category. Unlike the youngest, where the percentage decreased, the years 51-65 and older, increased their percentage. Lastly, the level of donation in the 26-35 age group declined considerably in 2010, from 31% to 24%.
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This version is better.
By examining the chart, we can conclude that there was an increase as people got older and then a decrease in the percentage of British people donating money to charity in the oldest groups, for the years 1990 and 2010.
After comparing the two years, 1990 proves to be the year where people were the most generous. In the year 1990, the 36-50 year old category contributed the most to donation while in 2010, people from 51-65 years old had the highest percentage. The lowest contribution across all categories in the two years, was the 18-25 year old category.Unlike the youngest, where the percentage decreased each year from 1990 to 2010, the years 51-65 and older, increased their percentage from 1990 to 2010.
Lastly, the level of donation in the 18-25 age group had the biggest difference in percentage of giving, between 1990 and 2010. The level dropped from 17% in 1990 to 7 % in 2010.
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Eliza, You did an excellent job! I made a few modifications. This version also has 153 words according to the Microsoft Word count.
By examining the chart, we can conclude that there was an increase as people got older and then a decrease in the percentage of British people donating money to charity in the oldest groups, across different age categories in the years 1990 and 2010.
After comparing the two years, 1990 proves to be the year where people were the most generous. In the year 1990, the 36-50 year old category contributed the most to donation while in 2010, people from 51-65 years old had the highest percentage. The lowest contribution across all categories in the two years, was the 18-25 year old category.Unlike the youngest, where the percentage decreased each year from 1990 to 2010, the years 51-65 and older, increased their percentage from 1990 to 2010.
Lastly, the level of donation in the 18-25 age group had the biggest difference in percentage of giving, between 1990 and 2010. The level dropped from 17% in 1990 to 7 % in 2010.
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No these are less. Please recount it.
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Hi Eliza, I did a word count with Microsoft Word and it also came to 126 words. I'm proofreading it right now and I'll post my comments in a few minutes
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I guess we count differently, because I counted 151 words. Good luck practicing :)
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