I Cut My Bangs

Hi, I will talk about my hair.
I cut my bangs today.
When I cut my bangs, I am often told that I look younger.
Japanese people looks youger than their actual age. Why?
Is it because of the flat nose? Or the black hair color? I don't know.
Can you guess how old I am? I think that I look 23. Yes, I'm 23 (years old).

Thank you for your reading!
If you find a mistake in my notebook, could you correct it (please)?

Have a nice day!

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- (text like this) is a word you could add (but you don't have to) 
- text like this means you wrote a letter too much (should be removed) 
- text like this is a small correction


Well written! I have given some pointers to make it sound more natural. I hope you find it helpful!

Remember to have a space (  ) after any form of punctuation. A comma , or a period . etc.

Good: Hello, my name is Mizuki!
Wrong: Hello,my name is Mizuki! 

よろしくおねがします。 

When I cut my bangs,I often told that I look younger than age.

When I cut my bangs, I am often told that I look younger than I really am.

Japanese looks youger than age.Why?

Japanese people look younger than they really are. Why?

Flat nose? black color hair?I don't know.

Flat nose? Black hair? I don't know.

Guess how old I am?I think that I look 23.Yes I'm 23.

Guess how old I am? I think that I look 23. Yes, I'm 23.

Thank you for your reading!

Thank you for reading!

Good job. Please remember to leave a space after end of sentence punctuation.

I cut my bangs.

Hi.I will talk about my hair.
I cut my bangs today.
When I cut my bangs,I  am often told that I look younger than my age.
Japanese look youger than their ages.Why?
Flat nose? black color hair?I don't know.
Guess how old I am?I think that I look as 23.Yes I'm 23.

Thank you for your reading!
If you find a mistake my notebook,could you correct it?

Have a nice day!

I cut my bangs.

Hi.I will talk about my hair.
I cut my bangs today.
When I cut my bangs, I am often told that I look younger than my age.
Japanese people often looks youger than their age.I wonder why?
Flat nose? Black color hair? I don't know.
Guess how old I am?I think that I look 23.Yes I'm 23.

Thank you for your reading!
If you find a mistake my notebook,could you correct it?

Have a nice day!

If you're wondering about any of the corrections, please feel free to ask for an explanation! ^^