My First Presentation

Today I finished my first presentation in the ("The" is not technically incorrect, but it might be better to say "my" to narrow the meaning somewhat) college in Ireland. It was a group presentation about the topic lectuer gave the lecture topic given us last week and the topic was titled, "The Art of Conversation Is Dead". (Formal titles are capitalized) 

Actually, I think the topic is kind of somewhat ("Kind of" is good in normal speech, but not in formal writing) boring because people have different definitions for "the art of conversation" (This is not capitalized because it is not a formal title, as the one above was), so they will get different conclusions. In my opinion, "conversation" means talking with others face to face. As With the development of science and technology, we have so many kinds of smartphones and social media that we focus more on our networking world rather than our real friends as well as families and family. But for others, they Others may believe now is a new era of conversation (No comma necessary here) in which we can have conversation by sharing expressive and communicated content online via Facebook or Twitter.

In my group, we discussed and came up with many points for and against the topic. And We decided to present it by power point PowerPoint (PowerPoint is an actual name, so it has to be capitalized) presentation. However, I think this way to present of presentation is somewhat boring. And My performance was bad today because I always don't don't always know how to master the skill of presentation. I became nervous and looked at my speech draft all the time the whole time. :(

You have good English-writing ability, and I think you will go far in your studies.  If this is a journal entry, then some of your statements, like "kind of", would be okay.  If it is a formal essay, trite statements would need to be eliminated.  I thought this was an interesting couple of paragraphs, and I hope you are soon able to master the skill of presentation!

My first presentation

Today I finished my first presentation in my college in Ireland. It was a group presentation about the topic the lecturer gave us last week which was "The art of conversation is dead".

Actually, I think the topic is kind of boring because people have different definitions for "the art of conversation", so they will come to different conclusions. In my opinion, "conversation" means talk with others face to face. As the development of science and technology continues, we have so many kinds of smartphones and social media that we focus more on our networking world rather than our real friends as well as families. But for others, they may believe now is a new era of conversation, in which we can have conversation by sharing expressive and communicated content online via Facebook or Twitter.

In my group, we discussed and came up with many points for and against the topic, which we decided to present it by power point presentation. However, I think this way of presentation is somewhat boring. And my performance was bad today because I don't always don't know how to master the skill of presentation. I became nervous and looked at my speech draft all the time. :(

[Good job.  One way to prepare a presentation is to practice in front of a mirror.  This is difficult with a slide presentation.  The important thing is to practice aloud, since people tend to skip over their errors when they imagine the speech.]