The Itaewon Global Village festival

I went to the Itaewon Global Village festival with my mother and younger brother yesterday.
We arrived at Itaewon nearly 4:40p.m.
We couldn't see some of the events, because we arrived late.
We walked along a street which was lined with food booths and various cultural experience booths.
There were too many people were in the street, so it was hard to walk.
I ate an Morrocan sandwich which is called "Koufta".
It was very very tasty!!!
I want to eat it again if I have a chance later.
Many people were waiting in line at this Morrocan food booth.
We looked around the street.
Above all, we spent most of our time at the DJ box.
DJs were playing good music.
Next year, I would like to go there earlier and experience more various things.

Hello Soo,

There is some really good writing here and it sounds like a really good event. Next time I think you should try and join more sentences together and also write in paragraphs rather than a new line for each sentence.

Hope this helps

Bob

Itaewon global village festival

I went to Itaewon global village festival with my mother and younger brother yesterday.
We arrived at Itaewon at nearly 4: 40p.m.
We couldn't see various events because we arrived late.
We walked along the street, which was lined with food booths and various cultural experience booths.
There were too many people were in the street, so it was hard to walk.
I ate an Morrocan sandwich which is called "Koufta".
It was very very delicious!!!
I want to eat it if I have a chance later.
Many people were waiting in line at this Morrocan food booth.
We looked around the street.
Mostly, we spent our time most at DJ box.
DJs were playing good music.
Next year, I would like to go there earlier and experience more various things.

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