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Please revise this report for studying abroad No.1,quickly>< My dream is to be a global manager like Matsusita Kounosuke or Steve Jobs. So I belong to international exchange circle and business circle, and my ability has been brushed up. I study foreign cultures in international exchange circle, and I have many foreign friends. I come to communicate with friends in different countries, using easy English. International students who came to Japan said that oneself grew up by going to study and experienced any more and acquired knowledge to say nothing of the language study ability. And, they got important friends and they say that I have also to do so because going abroad to study become a really good experience. So I thought I can’t communicate with people with high degree of English skill or Chinese skill unless I study abroad. And, I am trying to set up business with my friends in my business circle. I established business circle with my friends and did various activities last year. Then, to achieve the target to establish by the net business, we acquired various experiences. It was made the awareness of me to meet the member of society who established actually, and having neither the skill to still establish it nor the experience. I don’t have the confidence and attractive for that though I was a standpoint where I have to lead the companion as the representative of the circle. So this project will fell through unless I have abilities or experiences as a leader. So far, I haven’t experienced special thing. I took the safer way in my life. Of course, if I stay in Japan all the time, I can spend safer life. But, to be a leader of one company, I think I must experience different from other people. Thinking so, it is important for me to study abroad when I am 19.And I must study in China which is the most important country in the world about economics. Though there are many programs of studying in China, this program is the best of all. I can study English and Chinese. I also study Asian Business with excellent partners. Moreover I can go to study in two marvelous universities. Another doesn't have the one that it is possible to go to study to two universities by one program. I want to participate this program at any cost.Through this studying abroad, my aim is to acquire important skills to be a global manager.

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My dream is to be a global manager like Matsusita Kounosuke or Steve Jobs. For this reason, I belong to an international exchange circle and a business circle, and my abilities have been brushed up. I also study foreign cultures and I have many foreign friends. I have come to communicate with friends in different countries, using easy (Did you mean only English?) English. International students who came to Japan said that oneself grows up by going abroad to study and experience a different lifestyle and acquire new knowledge, not to mention the language ability. Moreover, they got important friends and they say that I should do the same because going abroad to study becomes a really good experience. Therefore, I think that I cannot communicate fluently with people with high degree of English or Chinese unless I study abroad.
Furthermore, I am trying to set up business with my friends in my business circle. I established it with my friends and we did various activities last year. In order to achieve the target of establishing the Net business, we acquired various experiences. It was made the awareness of me to meet the member of society who established actually, and having neither the skill to still establish it nor the experience. (I don’t understand what you are trying to say…) I don’t have the confidence and desire for that, though I was at a point where I had to lead my companions as the representative of the circle. So this project will fall through unless I have abilities or experiences as a leader. So far, I haven’t experienced anything special. I took the safer way in my life. Of course, if I stay in Japan all the time, I can spend a safer life. But, to be a leader of a company, I think I must experience new things with different people and in another environment. Thinking so, it is important for me to study abroad when I am 19. Also, I must study in China which is the most important country in the world concerning economics. Though there are many programs of studying in China, this program is the best of all. I can study English and Chinese. I can also study Asian Business with excellent partners. Moreover I can go study in two marvelous universities. Other programs do not have the possibility to go to study in two universities as a part of only one program. I want to participate in this program at any cost. Through this studying abroad, my aim is to acquire important skills to be a global manager.

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