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Please, correct my English writing. Where does it come from “ Steve can probably live for 6 weeks at most.”? It was heard that Steve left from his work for days because of illness. Daily magazine reports that his condition is worse than we heard. The Inquirer magazine said that his illness is worse than we expected so he could live for only six weeks based on some shocking photos showing that he is really sick. Steve in the photos wears jeans and they looks loose because he seems to lose weight. It seems that he Is getting side-effects because of cancer cure. Some doctors said that he had a cancer again so he lost 45-pound weight. They guess that he could live for 6-weeks. Some people around him said that he can’t Walk smoothly and seems like so painful when we walks. However, there are some optimistic articles. Business insider reports that Steve showed up in the headquarter of Apple and some people saw him. One of the employees who saw him wrote on his blog that he ran into steve when he walked out of the headquarter of coopertino. The truth about steve’s gossip will be judged soon. ABC reported that he will join the business leaders in San Francisco held by president Obama.

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혹시 제 에세이를 수정할 시간이 있으신지 궁금합니까?
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Please correct my English writing.

Where did this come from? “ Steve will probably live for 6 weeks at the most.”

I heard that Steve Jobs is taking a long absence from his work due to illness. Daily magazine reports that his

condition is now (actually) worse than we heard previously. The National Inquirer magazine said that his illness is worse than we thought.

The fact that he might only live for only six weeks was based on some shocking photos that showed him looking  that he is really thin. < he looked thin - it was only guessed that he was very sick

In the photos Steve Jobs wears jeans and they looks loose because he's appeared to have lost weight. It looked like he might be having side-effects of chemotherapy. Some doctors said that he had a cancer again and he's lost 45-pounds. weight. They estimated that he could live for about 6 more weeks. Some people around him said that he can’t walk well and seems to be in a lot of pain.

However, there are some optimistic articles. Business insider reports that Steve showed up at the

headquarters of Apple and some people saw him there. One of the employees who saw him wrote in his blog that he ran into Steve when he walked out of Apple Headquarters.

The truth about Steve Job's health condition (status) will soon be known.
will be judged soon. ABC reported that he will join the business leaders in
San Francisco, at the __name of event here_____held by President Obama.



 
빨간색    = 대문자로써주세요.    Capitalization
파란색   = 정정 & 철자                 Correction & Spelling
녹색        = 더자연스러운방법    More natural / common & Optional
보라색    = 코멘트 / 제안              Comment - Suggestion
 밑줄       = 구두점과 띄어쓰기   Punctuation - Spacing
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