Hi! I'm Tomoya. I told you about my daily happenings Let me tell you about my day.  Today , I went to shinjuku with my friends in order to go shopping. I walked around the shinjuku station all day long. Therefore I'm tired... But I was glad to buy the cool shoes! Today's shopping has gone good well! In fact, my new shoes is are expensive for me. I think I spent money too much money... Little mistake :(

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I crossed out the second sentence not because it was all wrong but because daily happenings is not a common way of saying such a thought.

Holiday

Hi! I'm Tomoya. I told you about my daily happenings. Today, I went to Shinjuku with my friends in order to go shopping. I walked around the Shinjuku station all day long, that's why Therefore I'm tiered... But I was glad to buy the coolest shoes! Today's shopping went well has gone good! In fact, My new shoes were is expensive for me. I think I made a little mistake and spent money too much... Little mistake :(

holiday

Hi! I'm Tomoya. I told you about my daily happenings. Today, I went to shinjuku with my friends in order to go shopping. I walked around the shinjuku station all day long. Therefore I'm tired... But I was glad to buy the cool shoes! Today's shopping has gone good well! In fact, my new shoes is are expensive for me. I think I spent money too much money... Little mistake :(

Shoes can be expensive! :)