What happened in Seoul plaza?

Seoul is the capital of South Korea. I've worked in a cityhall as a tour guide.

These days, some people have been opposed to the homosexual festival supposed to be held on 9th June at Seoul plaza located in front of the cityhall building.

The mayor of Seoul permitted the festival to be held in Seoul plaza.

They have demonstrated against the festival for a few months.

Everyday they scream out to make people agree with their opinion.

It is so disrupting that I cannot concentrate on my work. No matter how many times* people ask policemen to stop the demonstration, they couldn't do stop it and** in South Korea the religious freedom is guaranteed.

Red = I corrected spelling mistake

Blue = I added a word

*I am not sure exactly what you meant in this instance, but something had to be added. Adding "many times" it changes the sentence to mean that people asked a lot, but with no effect.

**You might want to consider changing this word to "because". They couldnt stop the demonstration because religious freedom is guaranteed in South Korea? If it's not "because" and you just wanted to add it as additional information, you could start a new sentence and write "In addition, in South Korea religious freedom is guaranteed."