It is a terrible day

I went to Pasa yesterday,it is a beautiful city.But it was a terrible day.My friend and I went to a spot……it was closed.We asked people,"what time is it open?"But they don't know.When we ate lunch at a famous restaurant,there were many people  waiting a long time.And a waiter got a wrong meal,the food was cold.We are so hungry,although food was cold we ate it .How about you?Should be many funny.

It is a terrible day.

I went to Pasa yesterday, it is beautiful city, but it’s a terrible day. My friend and I went to a spot (What spot?), but it was closed. We asked people,"What time does it open?", but they didn't know. When Before we ate our lunch at the famous restaurant, there were many people and we had to wait a long time. and The waiter also got our meal wrong, and the food was cold. We were so hungry and, although the food was cold, we ate. How about you? Should be many funny.  <------(I'm not sure what you were trying to say here.)

Capitalize city names. 

I underlined (    ) the corrections I made.

Put spaces in between commas (,) and periods (.). So instead of 'day.My' it will be 'day. My.'

Your overall notebook entry is in the past tense so instead of 'it's closed' you would have to say 'it was closed,' and same thing with don't and didn't, are and were.