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My Finnish school day! I woke up at 6am, and i was really tired. I decided to sleep ''just a little more'', and after a hour i jumped up shocked; i was almost late! So then i quickly just threw on my clothes and makeup, i didn't want to be late from school bus! I ran trough the forest between me and the bus stop, and as i came closer, i began to see the school bus waiting there already. I ran even faster, and luckily, i wasn't late! We arrived the school yard with my friends, and we just talked about everything... What are we going to do on summer holiday etc. The bell rang and we walked to our class rooms. The summer holiday is about to start this week, so everyones' a little bit crazy here. we didn't really study anymore, just watched some movies. One movie was Hunger Games! It was awesome ! We had home economics, math and Finnish! The school day ended and everyone ran to the bus stop, we waited there for about 10 minutes adn the bus arrived. The whole bus was stuffed up! Ugh, i didn't enjoy it at all... And so me and my friend arrived home :)

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My Finnish school day!

I woke up at 6 a.m., and I was really tired. I decided to sleep just a little more, and after a hour I jumped up shocked. I was almost late!
So I quickly threw on my clothes and makeup because I didn't want to be late for the school bus! I ran through the forest between me and the bus stop. As I came closer I began to see the school bus waiting there already. I ran even faster, and luckily, I wasn't late!
I (because you are not with anyone else) arrived at the school yard with my friends, and we just talked about everything we going to do on summer holiday. When the bell rang we walked to our classrooms.
The summer holiday is about to start this week, so everyone is a little bit crazy here. We didn't study much anymore, just watched some movies. One movie was Hunger Games! It was awesome!
We had home economics, math, and Finnish. 
The school day ended and everyone ran to the bus stop, we waited there for about 10 minutes before the bus arrived. The whole bus was stuffed up! Ugh, I didn't enjoy it at all...and so I and my friends arrived home :)

 

Don't forget to capitalize your I's. 

In the beginning of your story, it seems like you use I too much. Try to word your sentences differently and give them some variety instead of I did this or I did that. Same thing with the end of your story, I felt like you used we too much.

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