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Visiting the Countryside Today, I went to the countryside with my cousins. We met a lot relatives there. After lunch, we played fireworks by the side of a river (on shore). It was a nice weather today, I even felt a little hot there. Probably because I didn't sleep well last night, I felt very tired today. So, I just sat aside on the grassplot, watching my cousins playing fireworks. In addition, there were fewer relatives to go to the countryside with us, I didn't feel any bustling there. After I went back to my home, I couldn't find my camera and I was in a sweat, it was terrible. Fortunately I found it at my father's car, unless I would freak out because of it. All in all, I felt happy today because I could finally go to the countryside again.

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Visiting the Countryside

Today, I went to the countryside with my cousins. We met a lot of our relatives there. After lunch, we set off fireworks by the side of the river (on the shore). The weather was nice, I even felt a little warm there. I felt tired today probably because I didn't sleep well last night. I felt very tired today. So, I just sat on the grass, watching my cousins and the fireworks. Fewer relatives went to the countryside with us this year so it wasn't as crowded.

After I went back to my home, I couldn't find my camera and I was in a real sweat about it, it was terrible. Fortunately, I found it in my father's car.  If I hadn't found it unless I would have freaked out.
All in all, I felt happy today because I finally went to the countryside again.

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Visiting the Countryside

Today, I went to the countryside with my cousins. We met a lot relatives there. After lunch, we played fireworks by the side of a river (on the shore). It was a nice weather today, I even felt a little hot there. Probably because I didn't sleep well last night, I felt very tired today. So, I just sat aside beside (less formal, more common) on the grassplot, watching my cousins playing fireworks. In addition, there were fewer relatives to go to the countryside with us, I didn't feel any bustling there. we might use the word "bustling" when describing a city, but not the countryside.  Maybe you could say "it was a very quiet day."

After I went back to my home, I couldn't find my camera and I was in a sweat, . It was terrible. Fortunately I found it at in my father's car, unless otherwise I would freak have feaked out because of it. All in all, I felt happy today because I could finally go to the countryside again.

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