5/15/2015

Suddenly the room shook as if like a ship floating on a rough waters. Then the wall tumbled down. Things on the shelves fell on to the floor and nearly hit our heads. We felt dizzy and did not know what had happened to us, but we felt a vague premonition (it felt ominous) of danger so we ran as fast as our legs can could carry us out of the house.
Our panic loomed larger when we see saw our neighbor was now in rubbers rubble. The houses, like houses of cards, had succumbed to the earthquake and were now were a pile of rubbers rubble.
Some people were trapped under the rubbles rubble and were waiting waited for their rescues to be rescued. The volunteers used their hands to dig the bricks and were trying to save these people who were trapped underneath the debris.
We crowded on the streets and were too afraid to go home. We preferred to stay out in the street because the houses did not give us a sense of safety anymore,

5/15/2015

Suddenly the room shook -- as if a ship floating being tossed about on a rough waters. Then the wall came tumbling down [like Jericoh]. Things on flew off the shelves fell and onto the floor and but luckily missed nearly hit our heads by mere inches/millimeters. We felt dizzy and did not know in a daze. We were confused of what had was happening to us. However, but we felt a vague premonition a gut feeling of danger arose within us and so we ran scrambled as fast as our legs can could carry us out of the house.

Our Panic loomed [it had already happened] larger when intensified/grew greater/ as we see saw our neighbor's home was now in rubbles rubbers. The houses, They fell like a pack/houses of cards; , had succumbed to the earthquake of a few moments ago and now were a pile of rubbers. [You had told us already.  So this is superfluous and you are not making a point]

Some There were people were trapped under the rubbles [I don't like word repeating so close together] debris and needed resucing waited for their rescues. The Volunteers used their bare handedly to dig dug into the fallen bricks... and trying to save these people who trapped underneath the debris. Learn how to use the ellipsis judiciously to affect the imagination of the reader.  Too much clarity in this sort of writing is as stale and boring as reading a report.

We crowded on The streets were crowded with those and were too afraid to go home. We preferred They rather remain outside /to stay put out in on the streets./ Their homes no longer afforded them the because the houses did not give us a sense of safety anymore. ,

Just showing you how to write better and not on being just grammatically correct.  You seem to have the call of writing in you.