Essay practice for 7th May

Today's topic: Nowdays, food has become easier to prepare, has this change improve the way people? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people may argue that food has become easier to prepare nowadays than before, although this change doesn't hasn't helped people. However, I have a different idea. In my opinion, food which is easily prepared has changed made our lives more productive. The reasons are as follows;

First of all, if food has become easier to prepare, people can earn more money in the hour time spent preparing food. People spend a lot of time to preparing and cooking their food, furthermore, some recipes should takes several hours. For example, let's assume to make discuss making a beef stew. We are supposed to buy the ingredients, trim them, and boil for 2 or more hours. On the other hand, we can buy trimmed vegetables, beef, and any other ingredients at the grocery shop. The latter can save much more time  than the former, so, we can earn more money in the time we saved.
Second, it would be possible to increase employment in the food industry . As I mentioned earlier, the food industry has increased rapidly and needs more employees for to make trimmed food ingredients, run the deli, and in other food companies or restaurants.

In other words, the convenience of prepared food means the expansion of the food industry and employment.

Hello Soohyeon,

This is a good essay with interesting content which I fully understand and agree with.

There are a few things we can make better. At your level you need to focus on patterns more than just words.

1. You make lives more productive

2. You spend time + verb-ing

3. There is an increase in something

4. You discuss + verb-ing

Hope this helps.