About my travel to New-York. Please, correct mistakes!

Last weekend we traveled to New-York. It was a very big сity. We were up on the 86th floor and saw NY from a bird's eye (view?). It was a spellbinding picture.
On the streets of NY,(there were) many people, cars and yellow taxis and a lot of skyscrapers. I don't want to live there but i want to sometimes visit this amazing town. We went on tracks of the The Central Park enjoying the spring foliage. We walked on the Fifth Avenue, the Broadway, and the Times-square. I had the feeling that I was in the middle of the scene of some film. I don't want live there but i want sometimes visit this amazing megapolis.(...But I want to visit this amazing megapolis sometimes.)I can't say - "I love you, NY" but you left a mark in my heart. I hope I will come back soon.

Notes: Overall, this is a pretty good entry. Watch out for keeping a consistent past tense since you switched from present to past in the middle of a sentence a few times. 

About my travel to New-York. Please, correct mistakes!

Last weekend we travelled to New York. It is a very big сity. We were up on the 86th floor and saw NY from a birds-eye view. It was a spellbinding picture.
On the streets of NY there were many, many people, cars and yellow taxis and above us a lot of skyscrapers. I wouldn't want to live there but I would like to visit this amazing city again. We walked along the paths of Central Park enjoying the spring foliage. We walked along Fifth Avenue, Broadway, Time Square. I had the feeling that I was in the middle of a film. Like I said, I wouldn't want to live there but I would like to sometime visit this amazing place again. I cant say - "I love you, NY" but you left a mark in my heart. I hope I will come back again soon.

A spellbinding picture is correct but it is not a common way of describing a view. It sounds a little too over-the-top for my ears. Like something out of the victorian-era. Perhaps a 'stunning/incredible/amazing/mindblowing/ view would work better. 

Foliage is only really used in scientific terms such as in ecology. Perhaps, the spring flowe 

About my travel to New-York. Please, correct mistakes!

Last weekend we traveled to New-York. It is a very big сity. We were up on the 86 floor and saw NY from birds eye. It is spellbinding picture.
On the streets of NY many-many people, cars and yellow taxis and a lot of skyscrapers. I don't want to live there but I want to sometime visit this amazing town. We went on tracks of the The Central Park enjoying the spring foliage. We walked on the Fifth Avenue, the Broadway, Times-square. I had the feeling that I was in the middle of the scenery to some film. I don't want to live there but i want to sometime visit this amazing megapolis. I can't say - "I love you, NY" but you left a mark in my heart. I hope I will come back soon.

Last weekend we (Who is we? This statement is ambiguous.) traveled to New-York City (without saying city, it implies the state). It is very big. We were on the 86 floor (of what?) and saw a bird’s eye view of the city. It was a spellbinding picture.
On the streets of NY there were (you didn’t have a verb) many, many people, cars and yellow taxis and a lot of skyscrapers. I don't want live there but have at times wanted to visit this amazing town. We went on trails? in Central Park and enjoyed the spring foliage. We walked on Fifth Avenue, Broadway, and Times Square. I had the feeling I was in the middle of the scenery of some film. I don't want live there but i would like to visit this amazing megapolis again. I can’t say - "I love you, NY" but you left a mark on my heart. I hope I come back soon.