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Drunk Driving There are many car accidents happened every day, especially in Hong Kong. Drunk driving is a common phenomenon nowaday in our society. There are many bad effects of drunk driving. To begin with, drinking is harmful to the driver's health. In addition, when people are drunk, their mind will become unconscious so that the innocent victims are easily got hurt. In my view, for the sake of benefiting people, our government should initiate aggressive programs to advocate safe-driving, and make severe laws.

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Drunk Driving

There are many car accidents happened happening every day, especially in Hong Kong. Drunk driving is a common phenomenon nowadays in our society. "Nowadays" isn't exactly correct English but you can use it....

There are many bad effects of drunk driving. To begin with, drinking is harmful to the driver's health. In addition, when people are drunk, their mind will become unconscious so that causing the innocent victims are to get hurt easily got hurt.

In my view opinion, for the sake of benefiting people, our government should initiate aggressive programs to advocate safe-driving, and make severe laws.
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Drunk Driving

Many car accidents happened every day, especially in Hong Kong. These days drunk driving is a common problem nowadays in our society.

There are many bad effects of drunk driving. To begin with, drinking is harmful to the driver's health. In addition, when people are drunk, their judgement will become impaired.  As a result, so that the innocent victims may be injured.  (Innocent people may become victims.)

In my view, for the sake of innocent people, our government should initiate aggressive programs to advocate safe-driving, and make strict laws to punish those who cause harm to others.

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