Practicing grammar with idioms

Hi everybody!

Today l wrote a short text with idioms, please correct my grammar.

Yesica and Mike were a couple, at least that was what Yesica thought.

Yesica met Mike when she was 20 twenty. In these those days Mike's job went belly-up because all [of] the things Mike was selling cost an arm and a leg. Also, in these those days Yesica's parents got [made] top dollar, after all her parents were as sharp as a tack for the with business.

Mike knew that Yesica was a pretty beautiful and innocent girl; besides Mike was boring with the [his] dead-end jobs and with [had] go to the back to the drawing board over and over again. Then Mike saw in Yesica the opportunity to save his day and his life,. Mike made up his mind and he decided to win Yesica's heart.

The Yesica's parents were not happy about it this, [but] whatever, Yesica won't wouldn't changes her mind. Until one day Yesica saw Mike kissed kissing other girl. She lost her temper and she was about to hit her ex-boyfriend,. She told him that she couldn't put up with his nonsense and he gave she her the creeps.

She cried a lot but she knew that there's no point in worrying about things you can't change.


That's all guys :D

Thanks for letting me read your story! Congratulations on writing with idioms, it's difficult! Usually in English we spell out numbers greater than ten (i.e. not 20 but twenty). Good job!