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winter For some reason in the moments when I have no camera with me, more miracles happen to me. Yesterday I went to the forest near my house. There were a lot of snow, but it wasn't too cold. I haven't laid in the snow for a long time and I really wanted to do it at that moment...And I did. I saw such a wonderful sky!!!!The clouds were running fast and they were fallen the special sunlight that there is only in winter. The light seemed so soft and light, and everything that it was falling on seemed so fabulous!How beautiful the sky and birches are when you look at them throwing your head back and looking at them upside down.There were few not fallen from autumn leaves on the trees that were covered with frost, and their white jagged edges looked so adorable!It seemed that the snow was warm, and it was a pleasure to touch it. On high trees there were a lot of birds, and it was indescribably pleasant to walk on a footpath, enjoying their singing and the crunch of snow under my feet. I really wanted to take a picture of the nature around me and show it to somebody, but I am happy that I hadn't camera with me as nothing prevented me from enjoying it:)

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Winter

 

For some reason in the moments when I don't have no a camera with me, more miracles interesting things bound to happen to me. Yesterday I went to the forest near my house. and even though there were a lot was plenty of snow, but it wasn't too cold. I haven't laid on the snow for a long time and I really wanted to do it at that spur of a moment...  And I did. As I was lying, I saw such a wonderful sky!!!!__The clouds were running moving fast and they were fallen the special sunlight falling on my face was so unique. that there is Only when in winter it has such a wonderful and magical quality. The light seemed glowed so softly and light, and seemed that they were just floating down.  Not only this, everything that it was falling on seemed so fabulous!

 

How beautiful The sky and the birches are when you look at them throwing your head back and looking at them upside down looked so different from this upside down angle.  There were A few not fallen from autumn leaves of autum still remained on the frost covered trees. that were covered with frost, and Their white jagged edges looked so enticingly welcome  adorable!  It seemed that The snow was felt warm. Perhaps, my hands were colder.  and It was a pleasure to touch them lambently it.

 

On high trees there were a lot of Many birds were roosting/hugging the tree tops. , and It was an indescribably indescribable pleasant feeling to walking on a the footpath; enjoying their singing songs/twittering melody/serenade and the sound of crunching of snow under my feet.

 

I really wanted to take a picture of the surrounding nature around me and to share this magical scene with someone else. show it to somebody, but I am happy that I hadn't camera with me as nothing prevented me from enjoying it:) With no camera in hand, I could not accomplish this.  Nevertheless, I was not prevented from enjoying this amazing ambience.


Very beautiful description and of how you are trying to express the feeling.  However, in this sort of creative essay, you need more vocabulary to express.  Still, the essay is good since I can understand perfectly in order to improve it.  This is by no means the only way to write.  It's just a style of mine.  It is OK to copy style of others and learn from them.  Soon you will find your own.  Keep up with the good work :)

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winter

For some reason in the moments when I have no camera with me, more miracles happen to me. Yesterday I went to the forest near my house. There were was a lot of snow, but it wasn't too cold. I haven't laid in the snow for a long time and I really wanted to do it at that moment...And so I did. I saw such a wonderful sky!!!! The clouds were running fast and they were fallen creating that special sunlight that there is only occurs in winter. The light seemed so soft and light, and everything that it was falling on seemed so fabulous! How beautiful the sky and birches are when you look at them throwing your head back and looking at them upside down. There were still few autumn leaves on the trees that had not fallen from autumn leaves on the trees that , were covered with frost, and their white jagged edges looked so adorable! It seemed that the snow was warm, and it was a pleasure to touch it. In high trees there were a lot of birds, and it was indescribably pleasant to walk on a footpath, enjoying their singing and the crunch of snow under my feet. I really wanted to take a picture of the nature around me and show it to somebody, but I am happy that I hadn't a camera with me as nothing prevented me from enjoying it:)

 

A photo can't replace the experience, but it can certainly 'set the scene' for you to remember or further describe. It also captures a moment that might never repeat in every detail.

Maybe the you look at your surroundings differently when you take your camera?

I take a camera everywhere, not looking for a photo, but to capture those moments.

Alternatives:

"The light seemed so soft and light, and everything that it touched seemed so fabulous!"

"... enjoying their songs and the crunch of snow under my feet."

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