Can you please help me Modification to improve my Essay. Please Thanks!

Recently, I wrote two essaies essays on italki. I hope that this way, I can to get help from others in this way to improve my English level. But However, when I on line online again there is no correction. nobody do it.
Why? It Is it because it is too so bad that you don't cannot understand what I wrote mean? Perhaps, it is because it was night time for them Or everybody was sleeping when I posted them it?

Help,help, Can you please help me?!

下一次, 如果你要我幫你更改, 可以把文章的鏈 接寄去我信箱 :)  是得, 这辺是睡觉的时候. 现在让我去看看你的文章