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The food we eat today is much healthier than in the past. As our society develop, people’s eating pattern has been changed over time in a variety ways. Over decades, with the improvement of international trade and food industry, people are able to taste different food and ingredients from all over the world. Despite of the diversity of the food we eat today, it is hard to say that the quality of food nowadays has been improved for the following reasons below. First of all, with the possibility of mass production, the food from other countries are able to appear in our meals almost every day. In addition to this, the seasonal fruits or some vegetables, which are only available during a certain period of time, are possible to be planted and grow in a greenhouse. However, to keep this food fresh and foster them grow faster, people start using more and more pesticide and preservative. It is proven that the chemical materials in the food are harmful and have a negative effect on our body, which can cause a number of serious diseases like a cancer. Additionally, due to the excessive use of fertilizer, the average time for fruits and vegetables to mature has been considerably reduced. As a result, the nutrients within the food raised by the fertilizer becomes scarce so that people have to consume more food to get enough nutrition. Furthermore, knowing that the numerous man-made pollutions and catastrophes have been destroying the world we live, a large number of people refuse to eat processed food because the uncertainty of the security of the food. It is obvious that we do not know where the food we eat every day come from and how are they made as final products. That is why people recently pay more attention on organic and well-being foods to be free from the danger that today’s food might bring to our body. The environmental issues such as climate changes and water and air pollution now threaten our life as well as the life of our next generation. Even though the state-of-the-art medical system that human have achieved so far, there still are a lot of epidemical diseases existing of which the vaccine has not found yet. In conclusion, despite the fact that human have achieved unprecedented improvement in every aspects of the life, based on the reasons that I mentioned above, it is hard for people to be reassured that the food we eat today is better and much healthier than in the past.

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Is The food we eat today is much healthier than in the past?

As our society develops, people’s eating pattern has been changed over time in a variety ways. Over the decades, with the improvement of international trade and food industry, people are able to taste different food and ingredients from all over the world. Despite of the diversity of the food we eat today, it is hard to say that the quality of food nowadays has been improved for the following reasons below.

First of all, with the possibility of mass production, the food from other countries are able to appear in our meals almost every day. In addition to this, the seasonal fruits or some vegetables, which are only available during a certain period of time, are possible to be planted and grown in a greenhouse. However, to keep this food fresh and foster them to grow faster, people start using more and more pesticides and preservatives. It is proven that the chemical materials in the food are harmful and have a negative effect on our body. which This can cause a number of serious diseases. like a Cancer is one of them. Additionally, due to the excessive use of fertilizer, the average maturing time for fruits and vegetables to has been considerably reduced. As a result, the nutrients within the food raised by the with the use of fertilizer has becomes scarce far less so that people have to consume more food to get enough nutrition.

Furthermore, knowing that the numerous man-made pollutions and catastrophes have been destroying the world we live in, a large number of people refuse to eat processed food because of the uncertainty of and the security of the food. It is obvious that we do not know where the food we eat every day comes from and how are they made as final products. That is why people have recently paidy more attention on organic and well-being foods. They want to be free from the dangers that today’s food might bring to our body. The environmental issues such as climate changes, and water and air pollution now threaten our life as well as the life of our next future generations. Even though the state-of-the-art medical systems that humankind have achieved so far are advancing, there still are a lot of epidemical diseases existing of which the vaccine has not yet been found yet.

In conclusion, despite the fact that humankind hasve achieved unprecedented improvement in every aspects of the life, based on the reasons that I mentioned above, it is hard for people to be reassured that the food we eat today is better and much healthier than in the past.

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actually, use this link -- https://docs.google.com/document/d/15ZqElACo2PkhyBJosGu60NFu2xOCGbBqYglN5wiSZV0/edit?usp=sharing
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I corrected this but it was too long! haha .. So, I put in a google document here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/15ZqElACo2PkhyBJosGu60NFu2xOCGbBqYglN5wiSZV0/edit You can see it and leave any comments or questions for me there. In fact, if you want to, you can use google docs in the future. It is a great way to edit and share together.

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