There are many characteristics factors [characteristics, attributes of someone or something] that lead to determine success such as intelligence, creativity and skillfulness are all included. However, my opinion is that the importance of perseverance outweighs  that of all of them even when they are other characteristics combined. Even if success does not always befall those who are perseverant, their persistence will constantly push them to do something extraordinary and prepare them for the next chance. Perhaps not in obtaining instant success but perserverance will push them to new heights and prepare them to overcome the future obstacles.

A few months ago, I read an article about/on Christiano Ronaldo. Then for the first time, I realized what the herculean efforts a super star superstar has to put with before standing ahead of all others with all the glories he reaches his summit of glory. When Ronaldo was just a small boy, he joined a soccer club some miles away from his home. Despite his passions for this/the sport, he was often ridiculed by teammates for because of his bumpkin accent showed his origin of from a humble Portugesian Portuguese village. He also did not stand out with his lean His skinny [skinny may carry negative implication but "lean" is positive, eg "lean and mean"] body did not indicate any greatness for the sport. while playing in that small club. Apart from all these Nonetheless, Ronaldo was so determined in to become an excellent player the best that and therefore exercised he trained himself much more than any of his teammates. Even once during his on leisure trips, he did some 3000 would not forgo his three thousand reps of sit-ups in his the hotel room.   and now what resulted is the most perfect body one will ever see Who can say anything but envy in their hearts over his six-packs? Thus even though Ronaldo was not outstanding with the finest skills at first, his perseverance made him what he is today. He may be a runt in the beginning, but now...

Not only persistence keeps us constantly doing something to improve ourselves, it also can be so powerful in some extremely difficult situations, in which even we ourselves cannot believe we can make it. Persistence constantly is pushing our limits and boundaries.  It is a powerful weapon to spur us on even though we may not believe in ourselves.

The Qing Empire used to have the best cavalry was the best in the world of their time.  They which enabled it to conquered many Ming cities in the territory of the Ming Dynasty. While Here is a story in which one side perserved while the other did not.  the Chinese general, Yuan Chonghuan, showed exceptional perseverance and determinations When facing his opponent’s faced with the formidable Manchu army, the Ming General, Yuan Chonghuan showed exceptional perserverance and persistence. 

There are many characteristics that lead to success. Intelligence, creativity and skillfulness are all included. However, the importance of perseverance outweighs that of all other characteristics combined. Even if success does not always befall those who are perseverant, their persistence will constantly push them to do something extraordinary and prepare them for the next chance.

A few months ago I read an article about Christiano Ronaldo. Then for the first time I realized the efforts a super star has to put before standing ahead of all others with all the glories. When Ronaldo was just a small boy he joined a soccer club some miles away from his home. Despite his passions, he was often ridiculed by teammates for his accent showed his origin of a humble Portugesian village. He also did not stand out with his lean body while playing in that small club. Apart from all these, Ronaldo was so determined in becoming an excellent player and therefore exercised much more than his teammates. Even once during his trips, he did some 3000 sit-ups in his hotel room and now what resulted is the most perfect body one will ever see. Thus even though Ronaldo was not outstanding with the finest skills at first, his perseverance made him what he is today.

Not only persistence keeps us constantly doing something to improve ourselves, it also can be so powerful in some extremely difficult situations, in which even we ourselves cannot believe we can make it.

The Qing Empire used to have the best cavalry in the world which enabled it to conquer many cities in the territory of the Ming Dynasty. While the Chinese general, Yuan Chonghuan, showed exceptional perseverance and determinations when facing his opponent’s formidable army. Just upon knowing no other armies were able to come help him and his was more than ten times outnumbered by his opponent’s soldiers, Yuan did not recoil and with a determination of fighting to death he decided to protect that small and so important city where all his soldiers and many folks stayed in. The outcome was then so unexpected and telling the story. The patch of ground surrounding the corners of the castle was entirely covered with thousand bodies from both sides, as the attacks from the Qing Empire were defeated one by one. When the smoke gradually ascended and hid half the entire sky, the Qing soldiers found this little city which they previously though to be easily razed was actually the final grave for many of them. While the situation inside the castle was also not that good with hundreds of solders starving to death. Worse still, suddenly someone in the city found they had almost run out of their entire ammunitions. The horrible stillness was once again over the entire the castle. However, a strange thing happened the next day. The soldiers realized that no longer their enemy was anywhere visible, that they defended the last attack and won the war. What the Qing soldiers did not know is that if they were to keep attacking, they would have won the entire war. It is the perseverance that kept Yuan fighting to the last moment and the lack of it that made his opponent lose the war.

Hence I maintain that persistence is more important. This is the most essential characteristic that will even nurture other abilities. Marvelous deeds will also be made if we are determined and perseverant.

Just upon knowing no other armies were able to come help him and his was more than ten times outnumbered by his opponent’s soldiers, Yuan did not recoil and with a determination of fighting to death he decided to protect that small and so important city where all his soldiers and many folks stayed in. Sentence too long and awkward.  Even though the general knew that no aid will come and being outnumbered by ten to one, he did not retreat or to surrender the small and tiny city under his command.

The outcome was then so unexpected and telling the story. The patch of ground surrounding the corners of the castle was entirely covered with thousand bodies from both sides, as the attacks from the Qing Empire were defeated one by one. Thousands of slain bodies were littered all over by the city walls.  When the smoke had gradually dissipated ascended and hid half the entire sky, the Qing armysoldiers found realized that this little city which they previously thought to be easily razed subdued had actually become was actually the final graveyard for many of their comradesthem. While The situation inside the castle was also not that good even more dire; with hundreds of soldiers were being starved to death. Worse still, suddenly someone in the city found they and their ammunition had almost run out of their entire ammunitions. The horrible stillness death hung over the defenders.  was once again over the entire the castle. However, a strange thing happened Then something unexpected happened the next day. The soldiers realized that no longer their The enemy was anywhere visible, was nowhere to be seen!  that they defended the last attack and The persistence and perserverance had won the battle.  war. [Just a comment.  Interesting story comparable to the Battle of Thermopylae but weak argument because I can give you a counter example; the Siege of Masada.  Makes good debate.]What the Qing soldiers did not know was that if they were to keep attacking, had persisted, they would have won the entire war. It is the perseverance that kept Yuan fighting to the last moment and the lack of it that made his opponent the enemy lose the war.

Hence As such I maintain that persistence is the most more important factor; the mother of all success. This is the most essential characteristic that will even nurture other abilities. Marvelous deeds will also be made if we are determined and perseverant.

Good work but you always have a penchant for wordiness.  Anyway, from this essay I learnt about "一生事業總成空, 半世功名在夢中.死後不愁無勇將, 忠魂依舊保遼東."