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my farvorie plant Today, i want to share a kind of plant to you, the succulent plant which is my farvorite plant. Most succulent plant grow up in Africa area. But people raise them at home or greenhouse as pot plants. There are 3 features i like so much.The first is that they are colorful, red, purple, pink, blue,brone, sivler,and so on. Also, they can change their color rang from season, sunshine, and tempreture. They have fantasy color in spring, and most of them will turn green and begin their dormancy , when autumn and winter come, their will paint themslves again. They like spring and autumn most, me too. The second caracteristc is reproduction. Most of them can reproduct via their leaves. We can remove a leaf from their stem, then put the leaf on the soil. After a while, a new shoot will grow from the end of the leaf. It's interesting and amazing. I have use leaves to reproduct lots of new plants. The last reason i like them is their shape. They have kinds of shapes, some like lotus, some like tiny bear's-paws, some like fat figures, they are so cute and lovely! I have more than one hurdred pot of succulent plant, i always take photos of them on weekends, and water them. Now, please enjoy my plants!

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My farvorie favorite plant

Today,  i  I  [1] want to share a kind of plant to with you, the succulent plant which is my farvorite favorite kind of plant. Most succulent plants grow up in areas of Africa area. But people can raise them at home or in a greenhouse as pot plants.
There are 3 three [2] features  i  I  like so much.  The first is that they are colorful, with red, purple, pink, blue, brone brown, sivler silver, and so on. Also, they can change their color range from according to season, sunshine, and tempreture temperature. They have fantasy fantastic color in spring, and most of them will turn green and begin their dormancy , when autumn and winter come, after which their they will paint themslves again. They like spring and autumn most, like me too.
The second caracteristc characteristic is reproduction. Most of them can reproducte via their leaves. We can remove a leaf from their stem, then put the leaf on in [3] the soil. After a while, a new shoot will grow from the end of the leaf. It's interesting and amazing. I have used leaves to reproducte lots of new plants.
The last reason  i  I  like them is their shape. They have many kinds of shapes, some like lotuses, some like tiny bear's-paws, and some like fat figures, they are so cute and lovely!
I have more than one hurdred pots of succulent plants,.  i  I  always take photos of them on weekends, and water them. [4] Now, please enjoy my plants!

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Italki limits the number of corrections and comments I can make in a single entry.  I must add my comments separately.

 

[1] The pronoun 'I' is always capitalized.

[2] Spell any number up to ten.

[3] I am presuming that you must place the leaf in the soil, and that it is not sufficient to merely place it on top of the soil.

[4] It is a little awkward to have the time ("on weekends") in the middle of the sentence, when both parts of the sentence share the same time. Consider these alternatives:

"I always take photos and water them on weekends."

"On weekends I always take photos and water them."

 

Even though I have made a lot of corrections, most were either spelling mistakes or not capitalizing the pronoun 'I'. Your writing is very good. Well done.

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My favorite Plant

Today, I want to share a kind of plant with you, the succulent plant which is my favorite plant. Most succulent plants grow up in the region of Africa. But people raise them at home or in a greenhouse as potted plants.
There are 3 features I like so much. The first is that they are colorful: red, purple, pink, blue, brone, silver and so on. Also, they can change their color range from season, sunshine and temperature. They have a fantasy color in spring; and most of them will turn green and begin their dormancy when autumn and winter come. Then they will paint themselves again. They like spring and autumn most, me too.
The second characteristc is reproduction. Most of them can reproduce via their leaves. We can remove a leaf from their stem, then put the leaf in the soil. After a while, a new shoot will grow from the end of the leaf. It's interesting and amazing. I have used leaves to reproduce lots of new plants.
The last reason I like them is their shape. They have many kinds of shapes: some are shaped like lotus, some are like tiny bear's-paws, some are like fat figures, they are so cute and lovely!
I have more than one hundred pots of succulent plants. I always take photos of them on weekends, and water them. Now, please enjoy my plants!

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Thank you! I will share more pictures of my plants here. I'd like to help you study Mandarin, but I'm afraid that my oral English is poor, I'm not sure if we can talk with each other fluently.
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Alister had great corrections, so no more from me! But, your plant is beautiful! I hope I can see more. I'm studying Mandarin, if you want to talk sometime, let me know!

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