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Real sights A city made of nougat lying at my feet. I had never seen that place before, but a feeling of having dreamt of it was melting its corners like a fondue. I had already tasted it, of course... Do you want to continue reading this article? Click the right button here: http://carmencorrea.hatenablog.com/entry/2014/10/09/060023 Hi! I'm posting my daily writing exercises on this blog, come in to read the full text, and if you find some mistakes or you feel like giving me some feedback, feel free to write below! :)

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A city made of nougat lying at my feet. I had never seen that place before, but a feeling of having dreamt of it was melting its corners like a fondue. I had already tasted it, of course. Perhaps it was a forgotten dream, perhaps that's what autumn does; it brings what one day was swept, it awakes what it had been slept asleep for years, like an old flavour suddenly recovered.

Ferris wheel was a difficult set of words, though I was almost sure I had read it some time ago; it was a similar language to the one spoken in that town; one hour less; eleven degrees more. I felt at home, like I feel here, in this room that has been mine for eight days now; familiar, as a nutshell with the size of my bones.

The view started with a white liquorice bar splitting into two lines, scraping the truffle rails. That city looked busy, but not busy-beheaded, not busy-desponded, not busy-speaking-alone... but busy like full performance toys on December 25th. The cathedral stood, like an upside down single scoop of ice cream of one scoop, a really big one. Then the clock house, the tin soldiers' fortress, the chimney sweep swept path, the gingerbread towers. Everything had been waiting for my glance, for my mouth, neatly in place, like I surely dreamt once. Chocolate squares were used indistinctively as thermal insulating insulation and floor tiles. I was impressed, by the efficiency and savour.

The bridges had whipped cream drops constantly running over it them (to agree with plural of bridges), hurrying up, carrying folded umbrellas, using them as hand whisks; and under it them the blackcurrant potion speeded (could also use "sped" which is more common) even more, probably to pour itself into the tea cup of a caterpillar smoking a hookah. Yes, a caterpillar like that had to be the artificer, I'm almost sure.

A city made of nougat lying at my feet, and a fresh bulgy orange warming it up behind the smoke, the sky was actually clean, the temperature sort of awake-cold, delicious, dream-warm, unsweetened fruit compote. Now I think I may have not tasted it before, just in dreams, dreams I had forgotten, real sights now.

 

Ahhh, it's great to have another Carmen creation; I've missed them! Great job!

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Real Sights

A city made of nougat lying at my feet. I had never seen this that place before, but a feeling of having dreamt of it was melting its corners like a fondue. I had already tasted it, of course... Do you want to continue reading this article? Click the right button here:

http://carmencorrea.hatenablog.com/entry/2014/10/09/060023

Hi! I'm posting my daily writing exercises on this blog, come in to read the full text, and if you find some mistakes or you feel like giving me some feedback, feel free to write below! :)

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And I like your comments, always grateful to read them :)
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I often mix up the reality with my dreams. By the way I like your descriptions.

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