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Albert Albert was the owner of the only bookstore in the city - The Book's kingdom. He has been running his shop for over ten years now and he has never regretted a thing. After all, business went well and he loved books more then anything else. Once one of his friends suggested Albert selling his bookstore and running shop with toys, according to this friend toy shop was much more entertaining and gained to his owner better opportunities for meeting with young ladies. Albert has nonetheless never given second thought to this idea; not because there already was toy shop in the city but because he could never say goodbye to his shop. It was his home. And that was more true than it could seem, since there was attic room above the room where he sells books. In this room he had everything he needed for pleasant life - bed, coffee table, small wardrobe and two shelves. There were no books on his shelves however because every time he read one he immediately replace it downstairs and sold the book for cheaper price - since it was actually second hand book.

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I am editing your piece to make it sound more like a story that you are describing to a reader...  You have already a good correction :)


Albert,  was the owner of the only bookstore in the city - The Book's Kingdom, the city's only bookstore, . He has been running his shop enterprise for over ten years now but  and he has never a regretted a thing.


After all, the business went well and he loved books more than anything else. Once, one of his a friends suggested Albert selling his the bookstore and running shop with a toys store instead. , According to this friend logic, a toy shop was is so much more entertaining and gained to his owner better opportunities for to meeting with young ladies. Nonetheless, nary a second thought had Albert has nonetheless never given second thought to this suggestion; idea; not only because there already was is another toy shop in the city,  but because he could never say goodbye to his beloved shop. It was his home literally as well.  For  And that was more true than it could seem, since there was is an attic room above the shoproom where he sells books. In this room It is in there that he has everything he needed for his quiet and pleasant life. A bed, a coffee table, a small wardrobe and with two empty shelves. There were No books on his shelves however can be seen on them because every each time when one was read finished, Albert would  put it downstairs in the shop to be he read one he immediately replace it downstairs and sold the book for at a cheaper price.  After all,  - since it was actually is now a second hand secondhand book.

 

A great story opening.

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Albert

Albert was is the owner of the only bookstore in the city - The Book's Kingdom. He has been running his shop for over ten years now and he has never regretted a thing.
After all, business went well and he loves books more than anything else. Once one of his friends suggested that Albert selling his bookstore and running a toy shop. with toys, According to this friend a toy shop was much more entertaining and gave the gained to his owner better opportunities to for meeting with young ladies. Albert has nonetheless never given a second thought to this idea; not because there already was a  toy shop in the city, but because he could never say goodbye to his shop. It was is his home. And that was is more true than it would seem, since there is was an attic room above the room where he sells books. In this room he has everything he needs ed for a pleasant life - a bed, coffee table, small wardrobe and two shelves. There were are no books on his shelves however because every time he reads one he immediately replaced it downstairs and sold the book for at a cheaper price - since it was actually a second hand book.

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