Hello Mr Alaric

Hello, Mr. Alaric,

Today I going to tell about my life, when I was young often i went to the river to fish with my friends, to us this kind of days were amazing

Today, I'm going to tell you about my life. When i was young, I often went to the river to fish with my friends. To us, these kind of days were amazing

because we spending a day out side of our home.the day before , we prepared everything about a day of fish, rods,earthworm,fish hook

because we would spend a day outside of our homes. The day before we went to the river, we prepared everything before: fish, rods, earthworms, and hooks.

and to much thing. We were going with our bikes the trip was about one hour but was funny because we talk to much and the part of the

We always went with our bikes, which meant the trip was about one hour long. It was fun because we would talk. 

fishing day then I liked was when lunch time came, we made a big barbecue, oh i miss this years, but never going to come back, i think

What I liked about the fishing day was when lunch time came around we would make a big barbeque.

so. see you alaric, i hope that you are happy with your family

So, see you, Alaric. I hope that you are happy with your family.

Had to reword a few things, so the format is a little weird. 

Hello Mr Alaric

Mr. Alaric,

Today I going to tell about my life, when I was young often i went to the river to fish with my friends, to us this kind of days were amazing
Hello! Today, I am going to tell you about my life. When I was young, I often went to the river to fish with my friends. To us, these kinds of days were amazing, because we spent a day outside of our houses.
because we spending a day out side of our home.the day before , we prepared everything about a day of fish, rods,earthworm,fish hook
The day before, we prepared everything for a day of fishing, such as rods, earthworms, and fish hooks.
and to much thing. We were going with our bikes the trip was about one hour but was funny because we talk to much and the part of the
We biked to our trip, which took about an hour, but was fun becaused we talked.
fishing day then I liked was when lunch time came, we made a big barbecue, oh i miss this years, but never going to come back, i think
The part of the fishing day I liked was when lunch came. We had a big barbecue. I miss these years, but I do not think they will come back.
so. see you alaric, i hope that you are happy with your family

See you Mr. Alaric, I hope you are hapy with your family.