Today

Today is sunny, I changed my phone number, and put my new phone number/it online,. and Later, a friend I haven't been in contact with for a long time called me,. We talked for a long time, I missed him so much,. We grew up together, but seldom contacted with each other these/the years, I felt/was happy that he doesn't didn't forget me and missed me too. But then, two of my friends called me out, because they saw my message online then and suddenly remembered me then to call me. I know them better.

你的句子是太长一点。我们时候现在在不做东西，我们用过去式共轭动词都啊。

When talking about things we are not going right now, we conguate all the verbs to past tense.

时候你写一个句子你也只用'then'一次。 你不能用'then'两次。要是你用’then‘不止一次听起来奇怪。

Today

Today is sunny, I changed my phone number and put it online. Later a friend I haven't been in contact with for a long time called me. We talked for a long time, I missed him so much. We grew up together, but seldom contacted each other the years. I was happy that he didn't forget me and missed me too. But then two of my friends called me because they saw my message online and suddenly remembered to call me . I know them better.

一共好极了！

你的英语水平比我的汉语更好。

Today

Today is sunny. I changed my phone number and put my new phone number online. and Later, a friend I haven't been in contact with for a long time called me and we talked for a long time. I miss him so much. We grew up together, but seldom contacted with each other all these years. I felt happy that he doesn't didn't forget me and missed me too. Then, two of my friends called me out, because they saw my message online then suddenly remembered me. Then they called me. I know them better.

*Your grammar is good but be careful with the tenses. If you are talking about a past experience, be sure to write in the past tense. Same with the present and future tenses. Good job!

Today

Today is sunny. I changed my phone number and put my new phone number online. and lLater, a friend I haven't been in contact for a long time called me. wWe talked for a long time, I miss him so much, we grew up together, but seldom contact with each other these days years. I felt happy that he hasn't forgotton doesn't forget me and that he misses me too. tThen, two of my friends called me out because they saw my message online then suddenly remember me then to call me. I know them better.

Good!

-Write in shorter sentences! This whole thing was one sentence and it was far too long

-All sentences must start with a capital letter

-Don't put a space before a full stop (period) or a comma, put one after

-Don't use so manny commas!