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A love poem - correct me I love I love to see you smile and I love knowing that I caused that smile. I love see you happy and I love knowing that I caused that happiness. I love to look into your beautiful eyes and I love the way I fall into them. I love it when you hold my hand and I love having the courage to grab and hold yours. I love that I want to be yours I love so many things about you but the most important thing is… I LOVE YOU.

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A love poem - correct me

I love

I love to see you smile
and I love knowing that
I caused that smile.

I love see you happy
and I love knowing that
I caused that happiness.

I love to look into your beautiful eyes
and I love the way I fall into them.

I love it when you hold my hand
and I love having
the courage to grab and hold yours.

I love that I want to be yours
I love so many things about you
but the most important thing is…

I LOVE YOU.

 

Perfect!  Pretty poem! Did you write it?

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A love poem - correct me

 

I Love

I love to see you smile
and I love upon knowing that this
I caused that smile which I caused...

I love to see you in happiness 
and I love In knowing that this
I caused that happiness. joy that I caused...

I love to look into your beautiful eyes limpid pools
and I love the way how I fell into them.

I love it when you hold my hand
and how I love having
the courage in returning the gesture.to grab and hold yours.

I love that I want to be am yours
I love So many things about you that I love
but Yet the most important one... thing is…

I LOVE YOU.

 

These are just my suggestions to polish your poem.  Sometimes, it is better not to be so explicit.  It is like wearing something suggestive to entice...

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Hola Karla, Overall, I'd say this was nicely done and touching. I have no idea, but did you write this personally?

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