Our Community Garden =) 

Our My family has a community garden. It's not too far away from town. It's small and a green place where are a lot many of mother's favourite flowers. There is a little house shed where we can rest, drink have tea and save store our tools instruments. Yesterday I heard a strange noise. When I looked I saw It was a mouse! -_-' I don't like mice because they disease carriers can have illnesses. Once,  one little mouse ate gnawed at my Internet wire and made me furious.so I hated its >_< also At the same time, I don't like Mickey Mouse. :D (his spooky His squeaky voice exasperate me! =) ). Don't put all these smileys in your essay.  They are like Mickey's voice!

So There is are strawberries and raspberries; sorrels and cucumbers; and many others like a potatoes, carrots, beets growing in our community garden.  We also have and apple in our garden =) too.  Near the garden it's place is a small lake with a fish and too many-many frogs. =).These frogs like to arrange stage a concert for me - firstly one frog starts to sing, then another follow other start to sing in sequence too :D and soon, as if all of them join in the chorus.  It's amazing! Sometimes I see ducks in the lake.  There is a sign also says there are even beavers around too. *o*

One of my favourite things pastime is to let a big beautiful dragonfly to sit on my finger! It's so cool! )))

And Do you have you a garden of your own or any place with greenry and freedom? =)

Yes, I do have a private garden in the back of my house.  It is surrounded with bamboo on all the three sides so that it is a private sanctuary for me.

As you can see, you have wrong choice of words in many places.  You need to take note of them.  They have very different meanings and can lead the reader astray.  For example, after reading, I felt that you really need to have an adjective to qualify the kind of garden you are talking about.  It doesn't seem that it is the typical garden that one has in the privacy of their backyard.

our garden =)

Our family has a garden. It's not too far away from town. It's a small and green place where there are a lot of mother's favourite flowers. There is a little house where we can rest, drink tea and play our instruments. Yesterday I heard a strange noise. When I looked I saw a mouse -_-' I don't like mice cause they can carry diseases. Once, a little mouse ate my Internet wire so I hate them >_< Also I don't like Mickey Mouse :D (his spooky voice exasperates me=) ).
So there are strawberries and raspberries, sorrel and cucumbers and many others like potato, carrot, beet and an apple tree in our garden =) Near the garden it's a small lake with a fish and many, many frogs =).These frogs like to arrange concert for me - firstly one frog starts to sing, then other start to sing in sequence too :D It's amazing! Sometimes I see ducks in the lake, sometimes there are even beavers *o*
One of my favourite things is to let a big beautiful dragonflies to sit on my finger! It's cool)))
Do you have a garden or any Green place? =)

Your English is very good! Perhaps you could make the sentences bigger by putting two smaller ones together, like this: 'Our family has a garden which is not too far away from town.' and 'It's a small and green place where there are a lot of mother's favourite flowers and there is a little house where we can rest, drink tea and play our instruments.

But I only make that suggexstion because your English is good enough that I think you will understand me. It makes the sentences flow more beautifully if some of them are long.

our garden =)

Our family has a garden. It's not too far away from town. It's a small, green place where a lot of mother's favourite flowers are. There is a little house where we can rest, drink tea, and save our instruments. Yesterday I heard a strange noise. When I looked I saw a mouse -_-' I don't like mice because they can have illnesses. Once one little mouse ate my Internet wire so I hated it >_< also I don't like Mickey Mouse :D (his spooky voice exasperates me=) ).
So there are strawberries and raspberries, sorrel and cucumbers and many others like potatoes, carrots, beets and apples in our garden =) Near the garden is a small lake with a fish and many, many frogs =).These frogs like to arrange concerts for me - first one frog starts to sing, then others start to sing in sequence too :D It's amazing! Sometimes I see ducks in the lake, some say there are even beavers *o*
One of my favourite things is to let a big, beautiful dragonflies sit on my finger! It's cool)))
And have you a garden or any place with green and freedom? =)