A Dark Room (1)
The little girl who was playing with a piano was called P. She lived in a big house. She took a rest and saw the boys who were playing in the garden. Those boys were ugly and poor. She hated them. Those boys hated her too because of her haughty face.
One day, those boys discussed about something. Something’s evil and secret. They couldn’t let P know what they said. They found a covert place and discussed below their breath. People couldn’t hear clearly, they said, “…punishment…dark…nothing…scared…her…power…” Was that a prank? They said yes as they didn’t know the ill-effect.
They sent a letter to P. The letter said, “If you came to our party, we will never appear in front of you.” P certainly consented. She went to the place where they told.
Those boys were dirty! P thought. Those boys smiled cantankerously. Their prank started.
“Our party inside that room please comes into. Ladies’ first.” They invited her to go in a samll and dark room. P came into and those boys looked at her outside. Suddenly, the door of the room closed. She screamed and pushed the door. However, she couldn’t open it.
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A Dark Room (1)
The little girl who was playing the piano was called P. She lived in a big house. She took a rest and saw the boys who were playing in the garden. Those boys were ugly and poor. She hated them. Those boys hated her too because of her haughty face.One day, those boys were talking about something. Something’s evil and secret. They didn't want to let P know what they said. They found a place to hide and talked about it very quietly. People couldn’t hear what they said very clearly, they said, “…punishment…dark…nothing…scared…her…power…”. Was that about? A prank?" ___who?__ asked. They said, "Yes." not knowing the harm it might cause.
They sent a letter to P. The letter said, “If you come to our party, we will never play in your garden again.” P accepted their invitation. She went where the boys told her the party would be.
Those boys were dirty! P thought. The boys smiled cantankerously. Their prank had begun.
“Our party is inside this room, please come
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