First notebook entry: Introducing myself
Hello! My name is Shirley, you can call me Sheung.
In my free time, I like to read romance novels and watch action films. I also like to eat sweet food such as chocolates.
What a person I am? I am an Aries. I am helpful and loyal to who I love. I am brave but I am reckless too. That’s why I always repent of doing wrong things. In addition, I am playful. If you are my best friends, you can find out I am an interesting person.
I have been expected to be a hard-working girl. I know time is not waiting for anyone. Instead of spending much time in playing, I hope I can devote myself to study in daily life.
I really want to improve my English. In Hong Kong, English is very important. If I am not at English, I can't find a good job. Moreover, I love English. The voice when people is speaking in English is very pretty and the stories in English is very imteresting. I hope i can have a good English skills after 2 years.
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First notebook entry: Introducing myself
Hello! My name is Shirley, you can call me Sheung.In my free time, I like to read romance novels and watch action films. I also like to eat sweet food like chocolate.
What kind of a person I am? I'm an Aries. I'm helpful and loyal to people that I love. I'm brave but I'm reckless too. That’s why I always regret doing something wrong. In addition, I'm playful. If you become a good friend, you'll find out that I'm an interesting person.
I'm
You have very good English skills now! Wow! One suggestion -
(Use contractions more./ You will sound MUCH more natural if you do!)
I + am = I'm
You + will = You'll
If you need a list of these let me know. Great job!
You + will = You'll
If you need a list of these let me know. Great job!
Red = Capitalize
Blue = Correction and Spelling
Green = More natural / Common ~ Optional
Purple = Comment - Suggestion
Underline = Punctuation - Spacing
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