I remember

I had a sleepover at my BFF's house (BFF 就指那个人－ 你是在她家睡的) yesterday and had a great time. We have known ("met" 说明你们刚认识) each other since the first grade. We are just like sisters. I feel so safe when I am with her. Since I moved to a new house, I can't see her as often as before any longer. (因为你都已经说了 "as before", 就不用说 "any longer" 了) I'm just like a lock that lost its unique key. No one can replace her in my heart. I remember the days when we giggled, talking about cute guys, the days when we ran around the wheat field, the days when we sat together quietly watching the sunset. I remember her tears, her letters and her dreams. I remember.

你写地十分好，很有感情. 我希望你以后还能再看到你的朋友！

This is very well written, with lots of emotion. I hope you can still see your friend!

I remember

I had a sleepover at my BFF yesterday and had a great time . We have met each other since the first grade. We are just like sisters. I feel so safe when I am with her. Since I moved to a new home, I can't see her as often as before any longer. I'm just like a lock which lost its unique key. No one can replace her in my heart. I remember the days when we giggled, talking about cute guys, the days when we ran around the wheat field, the days when we sat together quietly watching the sunset. I remember her tears, her letters and her dreams. I remember.

wooow so sweet...