I would like to go to China because of several reasons. First, as we have seen in the last decades that are our demand is closely related to the level of economic developing development of the country, the economy economic growth momentum of China becomes is becoming more and more powerful, the Chinese art market experienced and an outstanding increase of in demand. I’m very optimistic that this trend will continue well into in the future. 

What’s more, China was (should be 'had been' instead of 'was'? because China is still a developing country?) an undeveloped (/a developing) country in the last few decades, the biggest problem that people are facing was to solve poverty. to solve that was poverty, Therefore, the government focused on developing the industry industrial developement, [which need required people having to have science knowledge and technology] (or/ which emphazied on gaining science and technology knowledge) , thus, only science and engineering courses were important in the at school. However, in the nowadays, the material life are is abundant for most of Chinese, people start to pursue a spiritual life. Students are have more freedom in studying freely to study what they are interested in. As a result, the demand (appreciation) of culture and art (usually said in this order: arts and culture) is rising, as well as the demand for artists and art works.

Under the influence of globalization, China are is more open to other countries’ culture, which is reflected in the various areas. There It is no wonder that you see many more foreign brands than local ones in the shopping malls. Regarding In terms of art, as the communications between China and foreign countries are increasing, [the events and fairs are getting more and more, the foreign artist are becoming welcomed and popular here.] (or/ not only more art fairs and events are being held, but also, foreign artists are gaining more popularity here.)

Moreover, through my experience in 2012 Affordable Art Beijing, we collected art works from artist and exhibited held an exhibition in China, we got (or/ received) thousands of applications, whom were not only from Chinese. Because of the space limited limited space, only hundreds were exhibited. just In short only three days, most of them were sold and the majority of buyers are were Chinese. Which means (or/ This shows that) the art appreciation appreciation and affordability of art are increasing.

If I have been granted an all-expense-paid trip and funding for and artistic project in China, I would bring more variety forms of art and culture to there. I bet the benefits are vast in many areas, such as broadening the local people's horizon, and inspiring the local artists which may help them develop the local art industry better. If the project goes well and sustainable sustains/lasts, it could also bring economic benefits to the local people.

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I would like to go to China because of for several reasons. First, as we have seen in the last decades that are demand is closely related to the level of economic developmenting of the country, as the economicy growth gains momentum of China becomes more and more powerful, the Chinese art market experienced and outstanding increase of demand, I’m very optimistic that this trend will continue well into the future.

What’s more, China was an undeveloped country in last few decades, the biggest problem people were facing to solve that was poverty, therefore, government focused on developing the industry which need people having science knowledge and technology, thus, only science courses were important in the schools. However, in the nowapresent days, the materials life are abundant for most of Chinese, people start to pursue spiritual life. Students are more freely to study what they are actually interested in, as a result, the demand of culture and art are rising as well as the artist and art works.

Under influence of globalization, China are is more acceptingably and openly to other countries’ culture which is reflected in the various areas, there it is no wonder if that you see many foreign brands are more than local ones in the shopping malls. Regarding of art, as the communications between foreign countries and China are increasing, the events and fairs are getting more and more, the foreign artist are becoming welcomed and popular here.

Moreover, through my experience in 2012 Affordable Art Beijing, we collected art works from artist and exhibited in China, we got thousands applications whom were not only Chinese, because of the space limited, only hundreds were exhibited, just in short three days, most of them were sold and most of buyers are Chinese which means the art appreciation and affordability are increasing.

If I have been granted an all-expense-paid trip and funding for and artistic project in China, I would bring more a greater variety of forms of art and culture to there. I bet the benefits are vast in many areas, such as broaden the local people horizon and inspiring the local artists which may help them develop the local art industry better. If the project goes well and is sustainable, it could also could bring economic benefits to the local people.