Antonio: I will re-write this story as if I were writing it in the United States using English.

Story

Therefore,after an excellent dinner with fish basis,he and hers grirlfriend go to do a tour with car.They park in seafront and while they look the sea,he start to kiss and bite she with force.She isn't sorry this,at some point,hers lips start to bleed and she look in the rearview mirror she observe with horror two big love bit in the hers neck.After this,he say come back at home.She try convince it to stay,but he repeat come back at home.They discuss at home a long time,after they make love,but in the end she was unhappy for his performance.She dress and return at home since to say nothingh.She wash for 1 hour,she dry and look in the mirror your lips very swollen.She smile,but she have ugly smile.In the end she sleep and try to forget all.

Story

After an excellent fish dinner, he took his girlfriend for a ride in his car. They parked by the beach and looked at the ocean in front of them. He leaned over to kiss her, but instead bit here lip. Her lip started to bleed and when she looked in the rearview miror, she had two big bites on her neck. He then invited her back to his house. She refused, but he finally convinced her to come. Once they arrived back at his home, they talked for a long time. Afterwards, they made love. She was not satisfied with his "love" related performance. She dressed herself and said nothing as she left. She took a long bath, then dried off and looked in the mirror at her very swollen lips. She smiles at little in the mirror, then went to sleep in an attempt to try and forget about what happened earlier in the day.

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