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Living in big cities - Please, have a look and correct my essay Nowadays, people tend to move to big cities for finding better job opportunities. However, some people think settling in developing cities has harmful consequences for people’s health. Personally, I still believe there are several benefits to citizen living in big cities besides its drawbacks. On the one hand, it is true that the lives in big cities do affect badly people’s health. Firstly, the level of pollution in big cities, such as air pollution from traffic fumes or industries, leads to several respiratory problems including asthma or lung cancer. In Hanoi, for example, there are hundreds of patient taken to hospital related to asthma everyday; therefore, citizens have to wear face mask in order to protect themselves when going out. Finally, the food with unknown origin is becoming an obsession of the people living there. It has experienced many people taken to hospital because of food poisoning or eating contaminated food in big cities. On the other hand, there are some advantages of living in big cities in terms of people’s health. The first thing needed to mention is the hospital facilities which is much more modern than these in small cities. The staffs there are very skilled, so they are able to deal with almost any case. In addition, the people living in big cities have greater awareness to help them to avoid diseases because of promoting widely from the authorities. In conclusion, I agree with the idea that the lives in big cities do harm to people’s health.

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Living in big cities - Please, have a look and correct my essay

Nowadays, people tend to move to big cities for to finding find better job opportunities. However, some people think settling in developing cities has harmful consequences for people’s health. Personally, I still believe there are several benefits to citizen living in big cities besides its drawbacks.

On the one hand, it is true that the lives life in big cities do does negatively affect badly people’s health. Firstly, the level of pollution in big cities, such as air pollution from traffic fumes or industries, leads to several respiratory problems, including asthma or lung cancer. In Hanoi, for example, there are hundreds of patient patients taken to the hospital related to asthma everyday; therefore, citizens have to wear face masks in order to protect themselves when going out. Finally, the food with unknown origin is becoming an obsession of the for people living there. It has experienced many Many people have been taken to the hospital because as a result of of food poisoning or eating contaminated food in big cities.

On the other hand, there are some advantages of living in big cities in terms of people’s health. The first thing that should be needed to mention mentioned is the advanced hospital facilities in larger cities. which is much more modern than these in small cities. The medical staffs there are very skilled, so they are able to deal with almost any case. In addition Additionally, the people living in big cities have greater better awareness and lower rates of disease as a result of receiving timely commun ications from authorities.

In conclusion, I agree with the idea that the lives in big cities do does harm to people’s health.

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