The Epic of Gilgamesh

Yesterday I finished reading "The Epic of Gilgamesh" which in my opinion may be intrest to (or - may be intresting for?) the | may (still) interest or may be of interest to or may still be interesting to] contemporary people [. Because the poem's heroes as ours as have the passions. | , because the poem's heroes have the same passions as ours.*] To disgrace Enkidu Gilgamesh sends the prostitute called Shamhat to him. And in the end she tempts him so the great warrior gives up and loses his extraordinary glory. After he has engaged in fornication the wild animals (his close friends-beasts) leave him and he [stays | ends up]* alone.

[On | As] an exemple of life this poem's heroes's [we can notice how | show how]* sin affects person's life and how in a jiffy* the great warrior can lose his glory.

The Epic of Gilgamesh

Yesterday, I finished reading The Epic of Gilgamesh, which in my opinion, may still be interesting to contemporary people, because the poem's heroes have the same passions as ours*. To disgrace Enkidu, Gilgamesh sends the prostitute called Shamhat to him. And in the end, she tempts him, so the great warrior gives up and loses his extraordinry glory. After he has engaged in fornication, the wild animals (his close friends, the beasts) leave him, and he ends up* alone.

As an example of life, this poem's heroes show how* sin affects a person's life and how quickly the great warrior can lose his glory.

Notes (*):

1. I'm assuming "ours" indicates that the poem's heroes have the same passions as our modern heroes, which would be shorted to the word "ours". But you might also say "the poem's heroes have the same passions as us," talking about contemporary people in general. I'm not sure which one you intended.

2. "Ends up" sounds a bit more natural. "Stay" implies that he remains alone throughout the narrative (when actually he ends up becoming friends with Gilgamesh!)

3. I'm treating "this poem's heroes" as the subject of this sentence--otherwise, I'm not sure how that phrase would fit.

I hope that helped! Did you like The Epic of Gilgamesh? It really is an interesting story!

The Epic of Gilgamesh

Yesterday I finished reading "The Epic of Gilgamesh" which in my opinion may be of interest to contemporary people because the poem's heroes as ours as have the passions as ours. To disgrace Enkidu Gilgamesh sends the a prostitute called Shamhat to him. And in the end she tempts him so the great warrior gives up and loses his extraordinary glory. After he has engaged in fornication the wild animals (his close friends-beasts) leave him and he stays alone.
On an example of life this poem heroes's we can notice how sin affects a person's life and how in a jiffy in little time the a great warrior can lose his glory.

A few tips:

-Don't begin sentences with conjunctions (such as because, and...)

-Plurals for words that already end in s have the apostrophe after.

-"In a jiffy" is too informal for a written text like this one, in my opinion.

-Revise the difference between "the" and "a"

Best wishes!