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Now it’s my time to introduce myself, what can I say, my name is Alberto and I graduated in the last November in Finance at the university of Rome Tor vergata. Last year I had a great experience in Sweden where I Spent five months as exchange student, an experience that I strongly recommend because you can taste the life out of your family, a kind of real life that expect awaits you in the future. Concerning my personality I can say that I’m a sunny(you could use positive or bright here instead of sunny) person and I could define me myself even as a team worked-oriented person some one believing in team work. I always try to reach my goals, but if didn’t reach them, I don’t give up and I try my best once more.

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Now it’s my time to introduce myself (,) and what can I say? My name is Alberto and I graduated (in the) last November in Finance at the University of Rome Tor vergata. Last year I had a great experience in Sweden where I spent five months as an exchange student, an experience that I strongly recommend because you can get a real feel for family life. (taste the life out of your family, a kind of real life that expect you in the future.) Concerning my personality, I can say that I’m a sunny person and you (I) could define me as a good team worker. (even a team worked-oriented person.) I always try to reach my goals, but if I fail first time (didn’t reach them, I don’t give up and I try my best once more.) I refocus my efforts. 

Is it good in English this presentation ?

First of all, I wish to introduce myself. My name is Alberto and I graduated in Finance at the University of Rome Tor Vergata last November.

During my studies I had a great experience in Sweden where I spent five months as exchange student. I would like to recommend that experience, because I could live alone and try to solve every problem that occured. In doing so, I also tried to simulate real cases that will be able to occur in the future.

Moreover, I am a sunny person, who is also a team worked-oriented one. I always strive to reach my goals; however, if didn’t reach them, I would not give up but I would try to perform better.