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美国的不好糟糕(terrible)天气!
今年的天气太冷的了...天天我每天去到(去 go to;到 arrive at)学校,等车都在冷的天气等车(averbials are usually after verbs in Mandarin)!我想念(想 think; 想念 miss)夏天!人人人们(人人 everybody; 人们 people)不会来来去去出门走动(i guess you wanna say hang out)里因为太多了冰和雪!有的时候我没有去学校因为天气的雪!为什么没有热的天气温暖的天气还没来呢(warm is better than hot when describing good weather)?!(There will be good weather, but still on the way yet ^_^)
美国的不好天气!
今年的天气太冷的了...天今天我到去学校,等车在寒冷的天气下等车!我想念夏天!人人们不会来来去去里经常外出,因为太多了外面结冰和下雪!有的时候我没有去学校,因为天气的在雪!为什么没有热暖和的天气?!
美国的不好天气!
今年的天气太冷了...天天我到学校,等车在冷的天气(每天都要在寒冷的天气中等公汽)!我想/想要夏天!人人不会来来去去里因为太多了冰和雪/由于冰雪的缘故,很少会有人出来!有的时候我没有学校因为天气的雪/有的时候因为天气原因我没有去学校!为什么没有热的天气?!/什么时候夏天才来
It was cold here..but now it keeps drizzling everyday:)
1.今年的天气太冷了>the word 了(le) has no pratical meanings, or it can stand for something has happened
2. 天天我到学校,等车在冷的天气, we usually state our reasons first then we talk about the consequence..like my correction每天[mei3 tian1](=天天)都要在寒冷的天气中等公汽>每天都在寒冷的天气中>Everyday under the circumstance of cold weather, 等公汽=waiting for bus..the translation for bus in China varies..公汽gong1 qi4, 公交gong1 jiao1, 公交车gong1 jiao1 che1, 公共汽车gong1 gong4 qi4 che1
3.我想夏天..I think this sentence is NOT wrong, but I think it doesn't sound natural in this essay..so I've added a word>想要..sometimes 想 and 想要(xiang3 yao4) are a little different, xiang3 is more of "thinking about/of", and xiang3 yao4 is want..我想要一个洋娃娃>I want a doll
4.人人不会来来去去里因为太多了冰和雪...similar to the second sentence, reasons first and then comes the consequence/result
hope these corrections can be helpful..^^
美国的差天气!
今年的天气很冷...我天天到学校,在寒冷的天气等车!我想念夏天!因为冰雪天气来往的行人稀少!有时候因天气我没去学校!为什么天气不变得暖和些?!
美国的不好坏天气!
今年的天气太冷的了...我天天去到学校的时候,等车在的时候很冷的天气!我想夏天!人人们不会来来去去出门里因为太多了冰和雪冰太厚!有的时候我没有去学校因为这样的天气的雪!为什么没有热的天气天气还不暖和起来?!
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