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correct my mistakes please those two charts shows us to development of world population There are two charts; First table shows development of world population in between 1880 to 2100. Second table shows development of urban population in between 2005 to 2030 furthermore second table shows two different sections, which are developed regions and developing regions. First graph shows world population had been increasing till 2050 and the among of population about 9 billions and than world population will have decreased rapidly about 7 millions. Second table shows; developed regions have dropped down respectively 20005 to 2030 and the among of urban population 1.3 million to 1.1 million have been falling. The other section, which shows developing regions have been increasing till 2005 to 2030. In 2005 number of developing person was 2.4 million but in 2030 this number will have increased 4 million Last word The new generation prefers to live in developing regions instead of developed regions

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Correct my mistakes please.

those These two charts shows us to the development of world population. (Use "these" if you are holding the charts, or are very near them right now. Use "those" if you are talking about charts that are not close to you or that you saw sometime in the past)


There are two charts; (Good use of the semi-colon) the first table shows the development of world population in between 1880 to 2100. The second table shows the development of urban population in between 2005 to 2030; furthermore, the second table shows two different sections, which are developed regions and developing regions. (This part is okay but I would write: ...sections. One is an example of a fully developed region; the other is an example of a developing region.)
The first graph shows that the world population had been increasing till will increase until the year 2050 and the among of population about 9 billions when the total number of people will reach about 9 million. and Then the world population will have decreased rapidly to about 7 millions.


The second table shows; us that the population in developed regions started to decrease in the year 2005 and will continue to decrease dropped down respectively until the year 2030, when the amount of people of people living in , and the among of urban areas population will have fallen from 1.3 million to 1.1 million. have been falling. The other section, which shows that developing regions have been increasing till since 2005 and will continue to increase until the year 2030. In 2005 the number of people living in developing regions developing person was 2.4 million but in by 2030 this number will have increased to 4 million. 


Last word: To conclude, the new generation prefers to live in developing regions instead of (or, "rather than") developed regions.

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