1/29/2014 DIARY

This is a page of your personal diary.  So it can be very informal.  After all, mostly for your eyes only.  So I shall correct it in a different style of you talking to yourself.

I was very Almost too busy for this entire almost 1month! I Arrived at the U.S. and almost lost my phone at LAX.  went to my school or hung out with my new friends.
When I arrived the U.S., I lost my phone in L.A. airport.
Fortunately a policeman found it and I was picked up my phone, so I could find my phone to get it back!

I Wanted to go to the dormitory and hang out with new friends but couldn't :( move dormitory, so I Had to lived for a week with the daugther of my mother's friend's daughter's house for 1 week. I Felt sorry, awkward because this was the first time we were the first time. met! LOL.

She picked me up the took me to Disneyland where I spent Desiny Land, I stay for 12 hours! There were So many attractions! I'll go there be back again! When I went to was there, I cried 3 times! First, when I watched play about aladin there was the Aladdin show, then the Second, when I watched paraidird. [Can't figure out this word!] Third, when I watched and finally the fireworks show.

When  my school startsed classes, I could move into the my dormitory, found that I have three lovely roomiesroommates!

A is Filipino  Pilipino, but she has been living in America for 15years. She is Almost an American now. T and S are American, but their parents are from Mexicon. [Calling someone Mexican in the US has a degoratory implication. Better to say from Mexico] All of themThey are so nice! My Laptop's top's battery is almost gone!

I'll be back! Maybe.....TOMORROW!

1/29/2014 DIARY

I was very busy almost 1 this month!
I arrived in the U.S. and went to my school or hung out with my new friends.
When I arrived in the U.S., I lost my phone in at the L.A. airport.
Fortunately a policeman picked up my phone, so I could find my phone!
I couldn't move into my dormitory, so I lived in my mother's friend's daughter's house for 1 a week.
I felt sorry, because we were there the first time.LOL..
She picked me up at Desiny Disney Land, I stayed there for 12hours!
There were many attractions! I'll go there again!
When I went to there, I cried 3 times.
First, when I watched a play about aladin.
Second, when I watched paraidird.
Third, when I watched the fire show.
When my school started classes, I could move in my dormitory.
I have three lovely roommates!
A is Filipina, but she has lived in America for 15 years. She is almost American
T and S are American, but their parents are Mexican.
They are so nice!
My lap top's bettary battery is almost done!
I'll be back! Maybe.....TOMORROW!

Hi!:) I've corrected your mistakes ~ When referring to one thing (1 month, 1 week , etc) instead of saying '1' you should say 'a' (a month, a week) it sounds more fluent.:))