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I am studying for my IELTS exam. Please help me to correct the next writing, is a letter and one essay.

LETTER
Case:
You live in a room in college which you share with another student.
However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it
very difficult to work.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,
letter:
Dear Mr. Jones,
My name is Carolina Moreno. i I am a student of at CS college.
I live in a room of college dorm room with another student. It has been a great experience, but now we have many problems because the arrangement is very uncomfotrtable uncomfortable, and it is very difficult to work hour here.
I want to ask you if is possible to obtain other a different acommodation kind,. I would prefer a single acommodatikon accomodation. It would be a is better more productive place to work, and I would be more comforatble. comfortability and the space terms.
I would appreciate hearing from you soon.

Kind Regards, 
Carolina Moreno

Essay:
Case: it is believed that young people have too much freedom and they don´t pay attentiom to the older people´s advice.
Essay:
Currently, the people criticize the young people without any for no reason or all reason. From In my opinion, never has it been so important to think determine why now they there are problematic people in all social levels.
When it comes to young people a young person's behavior, it isn´t is not a condition without explication explanation. I think that your A person's behavior is a result of the familiar formation received.
Now as far as I am concerned, disobedient young people disobedient can come of from a problematic family or [maybe haven´t family and this is the explication. ] need to revise this, but I'm not sure what you are trying to say
Sometimes a young person's radical behavior too can is only a cry out for attention need and feel them love. so they just need to be shown love. 
To sum up, I think that the a young person's disobedience isn´t "freedom" consequence only, but too is consequence the result of his/her emotional life and the environment he/she grew up in. seneral growth context, knowing that their Families are fundamental in character formation and behavior. With their families' influence, young people can learn the correct way.

LETTER 

Case:

You live in a room in college which you share with another student.
However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it
very difficult to work.
Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter,

Letter:

Dear Mr. Jones, 

My name is Carolina Moreno and I am a student of CS college.
I am currently staying in the college dormitory, sharing a room with another student. It has been a great experience, but currently we are having many problems. Mainly because the arrangement is very uncomfortable and it's very difficult to (work hour)(???) 
I was wondering if it's possible to switch to a single person room because it's more ideal for comfortability and space. 
I would appreciate hearing from you soon.

Kind Regards, 
Carolina Moreno