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I think that family is more important now that it was in the past.
I think this is because kids today need more support than ever before.
A child has more bad difficult choices nowadays. For example, in the past, the child or teenager had only two choises: to help his parents, to get a food and survive, or to die from hunger and loneliness.
(bad choice = to make a bad decision, like to start smoking... etc.
difficult choice = a decision that is difficult to make
food doesn't need 'a', it is an uncountable noun)
Now the child usually doesn’t need a food and warm clothes, because parents provide for him. And teenagers can start taking drugs, an alcohol, to contact with a bad company. That’s why the child needs loving families to guide them it and more support every day.
(you could say the 'childern need loving families to guide them'
or 'the child needs a loving family to guide it/him/her')
I also believe this because children need a financial support from their parents.
For example, in the past, the child had got an opportunity to survive by means of natural resources, but now it is almost impossible. That’s why children need family as well, it is necessary to have even a little financial support.
This is why I feel that family is more important now than in the past.
Can you help me with correction? Thank you.
I think that family is more important now that it was in the past.
I think this thatbecause kids today need more support than ever before.
A child has more bad choices nowadays. For example, in the past, the childs or teenager had only two choses choices: to help his parents, to get a food and survive, or to die from hunger and loneliness. Now the childs usually doesn’t need a food and warm cloth, because parents provide him. And teenager can start taking drugs, an alcohol, to contact with a bad company. That’s why the childs need loving families to guide them and more support every day.
I also believe this that because children need a financial support from the they parents.
For example, in the past, the child had got an opportunity to survive by means of natural resources, but now it is almost impossible. That’s why children need family as well, it is necessary to have even a little financial support.
This is why I feel that family is more important now than in the past.
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