Everything will be fine

I'm Yu, in from Beijing, waiting for the first snow of this winter. Even Egypt has snowed, how can Beijing not be far fall behind? The coming Christmas and 2014 without snow will not be perfect! I love winter the most is not because I love snow but because I was born in winter. so I was given the Even my name, “Yu”, which means “to shine”. It sounds so warm and bright.

Bad news come arrive one after another, and spread fast. I have applied to several graduate programs but the results turn to be are not very good. Can I have better news as Christmas gifts, Santa? All I want is a merely a letter starting with the salution of “Congratulations!”. I have had already hung a Christmas stocking on my mail box. Can Did you see miss it? [more polite, especially to someone who is giving you a present] I must leave Beijing when after I graduatione from the university. but where should can I go to? I have to think about mull over it. [not wrong but just some exaggeration]

Aside from the sheer desperation from waiting, I get got an internship on workday during the week and a part-time job as a math tutor at on weekends. The intensive work busy schedule makes me feel like a superwoman! But However, I don not like it. I thought I can do something more interesting but the plan just can not be was unable to materialize carried on for some reasons. What Such a pity! Just feel like It is as if an athlete with full preparation hoping to start a contest raring to go but only to hear the referee said, “Competition cancelled!” Can you feel that? Now you know the feeling.

I feel really down these days. Although I try to behave as if I am pat on a happy face in front of my friends, but only a few knew the truthof them know how I really feel. Though I received lots of many presents were received on my birthday,  but I felt no real happinessstill can not cannot feel really happy. Nevertheless, the rejected letters, the unrealized plan and the endless work push me to move forward. In the end, everything will be fine.

Good essay and your quality of English is good.  Some are not wrong but to show you better ways to express.  Good job.