Malaysia

Have anyone you [親切些] been to Malaysia before? Malaysia is a multiracial country which consists comprised of 3 three main races ( Malay, Chinese and Indian), and with some other indigenous people tribe. [don't use this, it is very insulting.  You are implying they are savages. However, you can use "aboriginal tribes". This is a anthropological term that is non-insulting]Malays is the dominant race of the country, while Chinese and Indian which their ancestors are outsiders [This has very deep implications of racial undertones.  Better to omit] are considered minorities here. Islam is the official religion here but people from other races other than Malay non Muslims are free to have their own faiths and religions. The official language is Malay, and English is the second language is English. Change your pattern structure to make your essay more interesting] The Chinese and Indians are also given [wrong choice of words; unless you really mean it.  Very racially motivated.  I don't think you wanted to say this even though this is the truth] have the chance to learn their mother tongue at primary and secondary levels.

Malaysia

Has anyone been to Malaysia before? Malaysia is a multiracial country which consists of 3 main races ( Malay, Chinese, Indian), and some other indigenous tribes. Malay is the dominant race of the country, while Chinese and Indian, whose ancestors were outsiders, are considered minorities here. Islam is the official religion here but people from other races other than Malay are free to have their own faiths and religions. The official language is Malay, and the second language is English. Chinese and Indian are also given the chance to learn their mother tongues at primary and secondary levels.