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The University wants to add a new course. What should this new subject be? (need grammar correction) According to the research carried out by one newspaper, more than 85 percent of the university students are hope to backpacking travel in their early 20s. And actually among that research responders around 46 percents are planning to backpacking travel or they already done it. So ‘Backpacking travel course’ is suited for the University’s new course. Backpacking travel need great physical strength and less money than sightseeing such as cruise travelling. Therefore, university students are perfect for the backpacking traveller. ‘Backpacking Travel Course‘ is helpful for the students because of practical and academical reasons. In practical reasons, this class provide real information for the students who prepare for the Backpacking travel. Students can get traveller’s information such as tourist attractions or famous restaurants from the internet. On the other hand it is hard to get actual, usable tips for the backpacking travellers. So ‘Backpacking Travel Course’ is necessary for the students who are trouble with this problem. Because backpacking travel course contain useful tips such as ‘how to packing the backpack more light, how to leave out the gypsies who are strongly begging for money in slum’. In academical reasons, this course provide knowledges about world’s geography and culture. It contain climate and vegetation information in various places on the earth. And beyond that simple information, it provide useful tips such as ‘Best season to travel West Europe is winter because of west coast oceanic climate differ from general thought’ or ‘Best period for the Salar de Uyuni is Bolivian rainy season that from November to April.’ And backpacking travel course also contain world’s culture knowledges such as food, drinking and dancing. For example alpine region in Latin America eat Guinea Pig. Cause people who live this region are hard to get protein. There are few animals because of rugged topography. For these practical and academical reasons, ‘Backpacking Travel Course’ are suited for the university students. Early 20s are perfect for the backpacking travel. Because they have a lot of time during vacation and they are enough energetic to go around all over the world. But after 30s, they have no time to travel because of their work and they are less energetic than 20s. Through this course students can be more independent and well-planned person. And through this experience their inner side must grow.

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The University wants to add a new course. What should this new subject be? (need grammar correction)

According to the research carried out by one newspaper, more than 85 percent of university students hope to go backpacking in their early 20s, and, among the research responders, around 46 percent are planning to go backpacking or have already done it. So, a ‘Backpacking Travel Course’ is well suited as a new course for universities. Backpacking requires great physical strength but less money than sightseeing, such as cruise travelling. Therefore, university students are perfect as a backpacking traveller. A ‘Backpacking Travel Course‘ is helpful for students because of the practical as well as the academical reasons.
For practical purposes, this class will provide real information for students who are preparing to go backpacking. Students can get traveller’s information such as tourist attractions or famous restaurants from the internet. It is hard to get actual, usable tips for the backpacking travellers. So, a ‘Backpacking Travel Course’ is necessary for the students who are experiencing trouble with this problem because a 'Backpacking Travel Course' would contain useful tips such as ‘how to pack a backpack lighter' and 'how to avoid gypsies who are begging for money in slums’.
For academic purposes, this course will provide knowledge about the world’s geography and culture. It will contain climate and vegetation information in various places on Earth, and, beyond that simple information, it will provide useful tips such as ‘the best season to travel to West Europe is in the winter because of the west coast oceanic climate’ or ‘the best period for the Salar de Uyuni is the Bolivian rainy season which is from November to April.’ The 'Backpacking Travel Course' would also contain information about world cultures such as foods, drinks, and dances. For example, people from the alpine region in Latin America eat guinea pig. This is because people who live in this region have difficulties getting protein, and there are few animals because of rugged topography.
For these practical and academical reasons, a ‘Backpacking Travel Course’ is suited for the university student. People in their early 20s are perfect for backpacking. They have a lot of time during vacation, and they are enough energetic to go all over the world. But after they reach 30, they have no time to travel because of their work, and they are less energetic than before. Through this course, students can become more independent and well-planned, and through the backpacking experience their inner self will grow.

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